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Posts by NiQyira
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NiQyira   
Jan 18, 2012
Undergraduate / 'My fascination with universities' - Common APP ESSAY-Why I wish to transfer [5]

Although my days spent at the local community college have given me an effective springboard concerning my education, I want to experience student life inat a university and feel the student life there.

The way you had it initially was kind of redundant. Hope this helped! :0 )
NiQyira   
Jan 18, 2012
Undergraduate / 'the liberty to write a novel' - Oberlin Supplement [5]

"Thus, it seems only fitting that my college be as "crazy" as I am. Now Oberlin fits this bill perfectly" I wouldn't necessarily describe the college as crazy. Maybe take this out and keep going with the idea that Oberlin is accepting of your true identity and makes you feel comfortable with who you are as a person and a student

"I mean what other place allows any undergraduate student with a decent idea to create and teach their own course?" Try rephrasing this a little, for example:Of all the colleges I researched, one aspect that made Oberlin unique is that the faculty gives students with promising ideas the chance to create and teach their own course.

"I'm certain that only Oberlin can be 'cool' enough to undertake as wonderfully unique an initiative as the Exco classes." I would suggest taking out this sentence. It sounds kind of sarcastic.
NiQyira   
Jan 18, 2012
Undergraduate / Eugene Lang College- "Tell us about a time when you were in the minority" essay [3]

The essay supplement question is "Tell us about a time when you were in the minority" and the limit is 250 words. Here is what I have thus far. It is exactly 250 words. Let me know what you think! Please and thank you! :0 )

One of the most controversial topics in the United States at present is the issue of gay marriage. One day after school two friends and I sat discussing different contentious subjects. As we became immersed in various arguments, the proposition for the suppression or legality of gay marriage soon tumbled into our conversation. My stance on this issue is that everyone has the right to happiness and love, no matter whom they choose to share it with. Therefore, the legalization of one's happiness should never be in question. Although people may have a variety of opinions and ideas about love, it should always be treasured and never punished.

My friends however, who are extremely religious, did not like my opinion in the least. They forcefully expressed that love is something to be shared only between a man and a woman and that same-sex marriage is unacceptable and disgusting and that it should be severely frowned upon.

The aggression and concept of their argument left me feeling inferior and dejected. As they continued to castigate the idea of same-sex marriage I grew pensive. My ideas had been belittled and reprimanded, but in a small way I also felt spirited and proud because I was not afraid to express myself.

Although we may sometimes found ourselves in the minority, it is still important to stand up for our own values and what we believe in, and to express our opinions, even though we may not be able to change another person's values.
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