Undergraduate / 'I will be the first generation' - family history,culture,or environment [3]

What is this for and the essay is way too colloquial.

My family history has little educational history . I didn't grow up where college or even education was a big issue.My upbringing did not encourage much education.I mean The furthest majority of my family members have not gone beyond twelfth grade. SoH aving to grown up around this only encouraged me to want to over look everyovercome these obstacles that comes my way and further my education. In my sayings y that I want I had to break the generation curse that my family started to become very comfortable with not only that but thinking giving up easily was okaybreak the trend of giving up opportunities . No my family doesn't classified under the section in the news paper as a celebrity or received many gold medals in the OlympicsThey aren't the best role models but thanks to them, I have the strength to do anything I put my mind to it was because of my family not finishing school is what makes me who I 'am todayto break free of the trends and to finish my tasks . Someone who sets goals and accomplish them, someone who faces problems bigger than a giant and still reply with smile and to others will seems as I'm better than okay. Although some people may look at it is as why are you so proud about this. In my respond nothing more than it's my family who not only pave the way for me to be stronger but now I can say I will be the first generation to ever finished the four years of high school and to go to college. This is my family history and this how they influenced me.

I didn't correct the last part but you get the idea. I'm sure english is not your native language but you have to stop being so colloquial.

Essays / Writing about dolphins and whales using literary devices [8]

I would refer to their cetacean intelligence and relate them to the reasons not to hurt domestic pets (Such as intelligence, character, etc). They are the second most intelligent group of animals on the planet. If you remove homo sapiens from the primate group which spikes the average intelligence up. They would be on top of the primate group.