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Mar 14, 2012

Writing Feedback / 'sales (in 1000s) of cigarettes in Tobado' - Describe a graph [4]

Hi! This is the first time I describe a graph. I'm very nervous, can you guy check it for me. Thank you very much for your helping.

The graph shows sales (in 1000s) of cigarettes in Tobado, with prediction for 2020. Generally, there was an upward trend in sales from mid 20th century to 2010. In the first four years, sales fluctuated between 180,000 and 200,000 cigarettes. Tobado's president died in 1998 of lung cancer, which caused a significant decline in sales which bottomed out at about 100,000 cigarettes. Afterward, sales rose slightly and remained stable until the end of 2002. This was due to the endorsement by Top Model in cigarette companies' advertisement from 2003 to 2005. There was a soar in sales then it stagnated at the peak of 250,000 cigarettes for two years. In 2006, the number of cigarette advertising model has lung cancer grew considerately. As a result, sales slumped sharply to over 100,000 cigarettes, although it then increased slightly and leveled off again. It is predicted that sales of cigarette will continue to decline by almost a third by 2020.

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The picture is not clearly because I capture by my cell phone. Sorry for the inconvenient.

NTC

Mar 15, 2012

Writing Feedback / 'sales (in 1000s) of cigarettes in Tobado' - Describe a graph [4]

Thanks a lot for your help. I wrote another one. Could you please check it for me? Thank you!

The graph shows sales in thousands of cigarettes in Tobado from 1994 to 2010, with a prediction to 2020. Overall, there was an upward trend in sales. Although the sales is expected to decline by 2020

In the first four years, the sales fluctuated around 190 thousand cigarettes. In 1998, President of Tobado died of lung cancer. This caused a significant fell in sales and bottomed out at about 100 thousand cigarettes. Since then, the sales rose slightly and remained stable at almost 125 thousand cigarettes. From 2003 to 2005, a top model endorsed for cigarette company. Consequently, sales soared and reached a peak at over 250 thousand cigarettes. The sales stagnated at the top for two years, but then the number of cigarettes sold plunged quickly to nearly the level before rising. This was caused by the cigarette advertising model developed lung cancer. In 2007, there was a marginal grew followed by a period of stability. It is predicted that the sales will decrease by approximately a third by 2020.