Undergraduate / The irrevocable statement of John Hersey "success starts with a failure" is locomotion of achievers. [12]

nan the essay asks about an issue so why dont u talk about either the history, culture or origin havin an impact on you...and they say discuss an issue so elaborate on the independence struggle stuff....

why not start the second paragraph with the tower of babel and delete the starting high school stuff. try sumfin like
the famed happenings in the tower of babel...thats how class was to me in the begining months of high school.but in my case i was the only lost soul...english sounded like gibberish to me.like a two yr old talking and mentioning only a few reconizable words....

then the part about the math...delete that. doesnt blend with the essay...
try sumfin like not only was i burdened with tryin to become english literate, i was crowned with a crown of thorns of math problems...