Undergraduate / 'I choose not to wonder' - Rutgers Admission Essay [3]

Hi:)
The whole passage seems to me a little bit general. I think you need to be more specific as to how you suit the school just as it suits you! As you mentioned "the prestigious nature of Rutgus", you may want to point out specificly how Rutgers can set you apart with your counterparts in terms of the courses provided, the academic environment you will be exposed to, etc. I think you can check their website and gain more ideas as to what it features itself.

You can be emotional in some parts of your essay, but in most parts, i suggest you keep analytical.