Letters / Vetting of appeal letter for NUS. [2]

Hi, can anyone help me take a look at my appeal letter for NUS fass? very much appreciated thanks.

I would like to thank FASS for considering my initial appeal; it has always been my no.1 choice. As such, I would like to request for an opportunity to be re-assessed of my eligibility as a prospective student of FASS, of which I have faith in.

Getting into NUS is important to me since the things that I would learn from NUS are essential to fulfill my mission, as has been the case of my polytechnic studies. Studying music in polytechnic, I have done sound design for experimental game projects as well as producing songs and an album. Getting into FASS would allow me to gain a holistic approach to arts not only in producing works but also understanding how the community perceive as a whole and all these is through the guidance of the professors in FASS's education.

I will definitely work hard to hone the required skills that would allow me to contribute to the arts scene in Singapore that will outweigh any short-comings from my past, through determination and passion for art.