dracena27
Jun 18, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'perception and life stages' - Why is happiness difficult to define? [5]
My oppinion is that you should try to vary the examples at third paragraph . Try to find something different than those used in the previous paragraph ( I reffer to toys, shoes, family members company).. Giving various examples shows you are a good thinker and find lots of arguments. Plus you show that your vocabulary is vaste.
My oppinion is that you should try to vary the examples at third paragraph . Try to find something different than those used in the previous paragraph ( I reffer to toys, shoes, family members company).. Giving various examples shows you are a good thinker and find lots of arguments. Plus you show that your vocabulary is vaste.