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Aug 20, 2012
Graduate / 'I began a family while I studied' - CASPA submission for Physician Assistant [3]

5000 character limit. This is a little over 4200. Prompt: Provide a brief description of your motivation/desire to become a physician assistant...

The medical field entered my world by force in the spring of 1996. While my husband and I were preparing to evacuate our home in light of the incoming hurricane, I received a phone call that changed the course of my life; my mother was calling to tell me that what had seemed to be a persistent stomach virus had turned out to be much worse: my seventeen-year-old brother had just been diagnosed with stage four colon cancer.

The strength of Hurricane Fran paled in comparison to the storm raging in my mind. Stationed at Ft. Bragg, North Carolina, I was six hours from my family's home. Over the next nine months, I traveled those six hours every week to offer support. I watched as my parents drove the two hours from their home in the Appalachian Mountains to the nearest cancer treatment center, and I began to see the hardship that was endured from not having local medical centers that could offer assistance during my brother's worst crises. My brother's battle with the disease that was attacking him from within opened my eyes to the complexities of human physiology and the issues arising from the shortage of healthcare providers in rural communities. It ignited a desire within me to understand human disease processes and to enter the medical field, assisting others in the attainment of health and wellness.

Following my service in the US Army, my husband and I began a family while I studied for my undergraduate degree. During those years, I joined the American Medical Student Association and started a local chapter of AMSA premed at my campus. Although my commitment and dedication to my three children would prevent me from committing to the twelve years it would take to enter practice as a medical doctor, I was passionate about bringing education to premed students regarding the numerous opportunities for serving rural communities after their medical training. I graduated from college and pursued a career in the medical laboratory, where I could learn more about the pathophysiology of the diseases of the human body. I loved the work in the laboratory, and I gained invaluable insights into the medical field while working closely with pathologists, clinical physicians, and nurses in a community hospital. My desire to work in a rural setting was met, but the ability to see a patient through a medical issue from beginning to end was not fulfilled.

I am grateful for the lessons that have filled my journey in medicine thus far. My time as a clinical lab scientist has allowed me to develop an understanding of the empathy, compassion, and patience that is required when providing medical care for various populations of patients. As a member of the leadership of our hospital, I have been able to learn team-building skills and have had the opportunity to offer input into ways to improve our patients' experience in the healthcare setting. I have had the opportunity to travel to other healthcare facilities, both in rural and urban settings, and experience the similarities and differences in approach to healthcare in each situation. I have been able to interact with all levels of the clinical team, and it was through these various professional relationships that I learned of the physician assistant career path. I have spent numerous hours in conversation with physician assistants from emergency departments, family care centers, and free clinics discussing various aspects of their chosen career paths, and I have recently begun shadowing physician assistants in an effort to obtain a more in-depth look at the intricacies of their profession.

I believe that a career as a physician assistant represents the culmination of my pursuit of a profession in the healthcare field. Upon completion of a physician assistant program, I aim to join the National Health Service Corps and provide quality healthcare to underserved rural communities. I believe that the self-discipline I learned in the military, the medical background I have attained in the clinical laboratory, and my overwhelming desire to serve the public will lead to a successful career as a physician assistant, and I look forward to the challenges and rewards that this profession promises to present in my future.
mgensic   
Aug 20, 2012
Graduate / 'Guatemala' - Peace Corps experience; serving others, working as a team [4]

Really impressive essay! It does a great job of conveying your compassion as well as your dedication. Just a couple minor things that didn't seem to flow...(and I'm sorry, but my computer does not like the editing tools provided, so I am just going to put my suggestions in a narrative form)

2nd paragraph: this has a powerful effect; I think you could omit a couple of extraneous words so you don't lose the momentum you had at the beginning of the paragraph

...language (just) seemed like an obvious step to take. (remove just)

Just a couple other areas:

rejuvenation that (results) from...it felt like you were changing tenses. Maybe change to resulted?

(delegation. If) everyone thinks someone else is going to do it then no one will do it and the work will not get done...this just felt a little awkward. Can you use a semi-colon to get the two sentences to flow together?

Again, VERY impressive in my opinion!
mgensic   
Aug 20, 2012
Graduate / PA Narrative.. Distinguished Career Path [2]

Your story from Jamaica is very moving; it shows your willingness to spend time with the patient and it expresses the compassion you showed this individual who was reaching out for help.

I think this sentence in your last paragraph...I know I will face long hours and late night calls, but the reward of making a difference in the lives of my patients will be worth it. ...needs to move to the end of the essay. It seems to be sitting in the middle of your discussion about your shadowing experience. It is a good statement, and I think you should use it, but maybe you could find a way to work it into your concluding sentence instead of its current location.

I also think you should add a sentence to your paragraph about your mom's care to transition into the conclusion. You could wrap up with a sentence explaining how this close relationship between your mother and the PA represented the type of relationship you wanted to have with your patients.

Great job on your personal statement!
mgensic   
Aug 20, 2012
Graduate / 'not only saving a life' - PA School Narrative (625 word max) on motivation [2]

The only change that I would make is to change the statement about single-handedly saving a life to one that expresses your joy over being part of a team that saved a life; I think that schools are looking for individuals that can work well on a team of healthcare providers while still showing the autonomy that you obviously possess with your background in emergency services.

great essay!
mgensic   
Aug 22, 2012
Graduate / 'I began a family while I studied' - CASPA submission for Physician Assistant [3]

Thank you for your kind words, Stacey! No, there were no PAs in the cancer treatment center where my brother received his care. I learned about PAs while working at the hospital.

There was never an option to go to me school with the three kids. PA school allows me to raise my children the way I want while still pursuing this advancement in my career. I am really looking forward to this next step!
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