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Posts by lildevil_
Joined: Jan 2, 2009
Last Post: Jan 12, 2009
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Jan 10, 2009
Undergraduate / I was miraculously admitted to my first choir after being dragged to the audition by my best friend. [16]

Um..I'm approaching my deadlines and I really need some help for this. I can't seem to come up with an appropriate ending and the total word count is already 141. Please help me out!

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In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience)(150 words or fewer).

Can anyone help me see if this is ok? The word count's 149. :P

"What? Me? No way! Singing is not for me!" I was miraculously admitted to my first choir after being dragged to audition. At first, I felt awkward "singing with technique", but as time went by, I was greatly influenced by the vibrant atmosphere - everyone was so devoted to singing that I wanted so much to be part of the community, too. Gradually, I learned to appreciate a variety of music works such as those in Sprechstimme and Canon, and built strong bonds with my fellow choralists. My participation in Turandot, Les Miserables and Christmas-caroling concerts also enabled me to understand the quintessence of choral performances. These added to my knowledge of an accomplished choir, which I had, on several occasions, used successfully in my job as the coordinator of my school's choir. Choir has become an inseparable part of my life and I will cherish these memories forever.
lildevil_   
Jan 12, 2009
Undergraduate / UW short essay ("stop eating pork in front of us") [2]

um, I am not very sure about this...
1. in the 3rd paragraph, "querrel" should be "quarrel", but I think my English teacher said its better to use "argument" in formal writing.

2. my english teacher again - it's informal to use "but" in the beginning of a sentence, maybe u should use "however" instead.

3. this sentence sounds weird- "I realised that people from other nations were not alien, but friendly as well"

hope this helps :P
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