Entropic
Aug 30, 2012
Undergraduate / the name "The Matrix" - Why CMU? Essay [6]
Hi,
I think you should still keep this line: /When one hears the name "The Matrix", one sees a different image depending on the type of person one is. Biologists see tissue, scientists see arrays of numbers, and some see Keanu Reeves. I see green lines of code/.
I really liked it and it's a great, unique way to open up your essay. I agree with people talking about "specifics." Be as specific as you can, and show your passion.
Hi,
I think you should still keep this line: /When one hears the name "The Matrix", one sees a different image depending on the type of person one is. Biologists see tissue, scientists see arrays of numbers, and some see Keanu Reeves. I see green lines of code/.
I really liked it and it's a great, unique way to open up your essay. I agree with people talking about "specifics." Be as specific as you can, and show your passion.