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angelparveez   
Sep 18, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Mother' She has had a significant influence on me; 'I was born in small town' [4]

Question:Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence.
significant influence on me is my mother
Hey(:
I need help in this essay.
this is the essay I'm working on right now...and I'll be glad if you guys can me please(:

I was born in small town. My mother and I dream was to attend a top rated high school in America. But that wasn't possible for my mom and I because we didn't had enough money to go America.

I'll be more glad if tell me Something else I should add...
Thank you (:
angelparveez   
Sep 30, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Mother' She has had a significant influence on me; 'I was born in small town' [4]

Mom a Positive Influence



can someone plzzz help me with introduction, conclusion and the voice and also the grammar

As i look toward my future i realized i would not be here if i were not for many people. Each person makes different mistake and gets different experiences in his or her life. However, each of us has that one person who gives you advice to improve those mistakes and that person influence your life in some special way. The person who influence my life is my mother. she has always given me guidance, support, and always encouraged me to be the best i can be.

Being new in America at the age of twelve, i was shy from my peers and mostly kept to myself. I found myself as i entered school, where i had the hardest time to handle things. People made fun of my thick accent and my other foreign ways. No one in the school liked me, or wanted to be my friend, and everyone made fun of me. I was the most hated kid in the school. At lunch time i would sit by myself, because people were so judgmental that they would believe what others said about me.

I used to cry every single day at lunch time. when I told the principle about it, the only things the principle did was gave them a detentions. One day i decide to commit suicide and get life over with. But my mother always taught me that life goes on, never give up on life. Life isn't easy to handle. Later, I soon realized that my classroom was full of kids that didn't have any respect for other.

Overall, I struggled a lot to learn the new things worked in this country and had trouble fitting into the social group and society at school and in this country. It was then, that whenever i felt down, or struggle and ejected from being the outside, my mother gave me comfort in sorrow and strength. she helped me open up. During the morning time when she cooked breakfast for me, and sat beside me while i was eating breakfast. she gave me that one advice that shaped my heart and it shaped my life too.

She always advised me to work with the other student in the classroom and bring something new to the table instead of making it a barrier. she told me to be the first one to extend the hand of friendship and to be patient, kind, and helpful. When it came time for high school thats when people stopped hating me. That's when i got to experience what it feels like to have a actual friends. it was then, that i started be friendly with my classmates and started enjoying the life in America.

Her advice and teaching character have always stayed with me throughout my life. It is because of her that i have gain the most of my education, and it is because of her that i am hopeful to achieve my future goals. she has positively affected me to have a mother such as her. she has not only been my mother and helped me stayed on the right path, but she also been the best friend. I have always counted upon. My relationship with my mother. Is something that i treasure about everything else in my life.
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