shkh23
Sep 30, 2012
Writing Feedback / Over-reliance on technology & ability of humas to think for themselves [2]
Hello frnds...
I appered in gre 2 months back,my score was not gud (quant-165,ver-152,AWA-3).I am planning to take the exam again.Here is an essay i have composed on possibly the most used essay topic.Nevertheless this is the first peice of writing by me apart from the essay i wrote on actual gre.I would like to have critical comments and also the scores any1 like to give.
Regards
topic - As people rely more n more on technology to solve problems,the ability
of humas to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Discuss to the extent u agree.consider ways in which statement might or might not hold true and explain
how those consideration shape ur position.
Essay -
I do not argee with the speaker's assertion that technological advancement has
rendered our mental abilities crippled.It is unfair to generalise technological
advancement in this respect.Technology has provided us easy ways to do things
but it does not mean that reliance on it has deteriorated our mental faculties.
If we look back from prehistoric times to stone age to modern era,it would be
seen that as the human beings have evolved over time our dependence on tools has
been increasing rampantly.From living in caves to skysrapers,travelling on foot
to supersonic jets & feeding on raw fruits/vegetables to Macdonald's
hambergers.Technologies has advanced manyfolds in this time duration.Man has
reached the depths of ocens and the extraterestrial heavenly bodies.Even our
normal day to day life is solely dependent on tools which we can call as
offsprings of technological advancement.we wake up in the morning with alarm on
digital clock,prepare coffee in coffee machine,read newspaper in tablet,commute
to office in cars,work on high end machines,enjoyment comes form video games and
TV.All this has made our lives convenient and easy.Moreover if technolgy would
be deteriorating our mental acumen then we would not have been able to develop
its advanced versions.we would have stayed complacent with the calculators and
would have not deviced supercomputes.
I woud like to concede that advancement in tehcnology spurs more advancement in
technolgy.e.g consider the fact that scientist like newton and einstein created
the foundation for modern physics and mathematics.Fourier gave us the
perspective to look at signals in a newer domain what we call as fourier
domain.Nevertheless we have not stopped at the invention of these theories and
tools.we moved on to make computer systems to realise those concepts,e.g FFT
techniques to faster the computation of fourier transform and to apply these in
complex systems like Sythetic aperture radar technolgy in remote sensing for
monitoring our globe as well as the universe.
In my opinion Technology has created abstraction levels which are wrongly
perceived as the deterioration in our thinkig capabilities.take an example of
Car,everyone who drives a car need not know the compression schemata of the
engines or the polymer composition of tyres.A little knowledge about the system
do help us to diagnose or fix small problems but more than this is not required
by a normal car user.Human brain has limited storage capability and here
abstraction provides us to live were the reqired amount of information
only.Abstraction also spawns professionalism in us.We need to know and master
some specific discipline with some hereabouts regarding the other disciplines
but we need not know the minutia of evrything.That the beauty of technological
advancement.We need not know the machine language or neworking principles to
work on a computer system.
It is true that technology makes our lives easy.It creates time for us which
would otherwise be used in doing mundane chores of ours.Now its up to us how we
utilise that time.We can spare it in playing video games or wacthing television
or we can fulfill our social responsibilty by teaching a poor child who cant
afford to go to school.In conclusion i would like to say that we have created
technology and it is upto us wether we become slaves of it and loose ourselves
or let it do the day to day work and indulge ourselves in higher pursuits of
life.
Hello frnds...
I appered in gre 2 months back,my score was not gud (quant-165,ver-152,AWA-3).I am planning to take the exam again.Here is an essay i have composed on possibly the most used essay topic.Nevertheless this is the first peice of writing by me apart from the essay i wrote on actual gre.I would like to have critical comments and also the scores any1 like to give.
Regards
topic - As people rely more n more on technology to solve problems,the ability
of humas to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Discuss to the extent u agree.consider ways in which statement might or might not hold true and explain
how those consideration shape ur position.
Essay -
I do not argee with the speaker's assertion that technological advancement has
rendered our mental abilities crippled.It is unfair to generalise technological
advancement in this respect.Technology has provided us easy ways to do things
but it does not mean that reliance on it has deteriorated our mental faculties.
If we look back from prehistoric times to stone age to modern era,it would be
seen that as the human beings have evolved over time our dependence on tools has
been increasing rampantly.From living in caves to skysrapers,travelling on foot
to supersonic jets & feeding on raw fruits/vegetables to Macdonald's
hambergers.Technologies has advanced manyfolds in this time duration.Man has
reached the depths of ocens and the extraterestrial heavenly bodies.Even our
normal day to day life is solely dependent on tools which we can call as
offsprings of technological advancement.we wake up in the morning with alarm on
digital clock,prepare coffee in coffee machine,read newspaper in tablet,commute
to office in cars,work on high end machines,enjoyment comes form video games and
TV.All this has made our lives convenient and easy.Moreover if technolgy would
be deteriorating our mental acumen then we would not have been able to develop
its advanced versions.we would have stayed complacent with the calculators and
would have not deviced supercomputes.
I woud like to concede that advancement in tehcnology spurs more advancement in
technolgy.e.g consider the fact that scientist like newton and einstein created
the foundation for modern physics and mathematics.Fourier gave us the
perspective to look at signals in a newer domain what we call as fourier
domain.Nevertheless we have not stopped at the invention of these theories and
tools.we moved on to make computer systems to realise those concepts,e.g FFT
techniques to faster the computation of fourier transform and to apply these in
complex systems like Sythetic aperture radar technolgy in remote sensing for
monitoring our globe as well as the universe.
In my opinion Technology has created abstraction levels which are wrongly
perceived as the deterioration in our thinkig capabilities.take an example of
Car,everyone who drives a car need not know the compression schemata of the
engines or the polymer composition of tyres.A little knowledge about the system
do help us to diagnose or fix small problems but more than this is not required
by a normal car user.Human brain has limited storage capability and here
abstraction provides us to live were the reqired amount of information
only.Abstraction also spawns professionalism in us.We need to know and master
some specific discipline with some hereabouts regarding the other disciplines
but we need not know the minutia of evrything.That the beauty of technological
advancement.We need not know the machine language or neworking principles to
work on a computer system.
It is true that technology makes our lives easy.It creates time for us which
would otherwise be used in doing mundane chores of ours.Now its up to us how we
utilise that time.We can spare it in playing video games or wacthing television
or we can fulfill our social responsibilty by teaching a poor child who cant
afford to go to school.In conclusion i would like to say that we have created
technology and it is upto us wether we become slaves of it and loose ourselves
or let it do the day to day work and indulge ourselves in higher pursuits of
life.