Undergraduate / '25 years of hidden solitude' - UChicago Response - Where's Waldo? [2]

I really liked your essay. I thought it was quirky to do it from Waldo's point of view, and it definitely will make your essay stand out. Your writing style is really strong, and it definitely amused me when you wrote about Waldo trying to escape the "masses".

I think one point of criticism I have to offer is, can you make the essay even deeper? You establish a strong and intruiging beginning, but now I want to know, why does he not want to be found? Is there some symbolism behind his not wanting to be found, and people's need to search for him? Can you connect those two somehow to something relevant to today's society, like maybe paparazzi/modern fame/today's 24/7 technology? Because right now while it is well written I'm left wanting some deeper analysis-there's something more there that can be discussed. At the very end, he asks "Where am I?" Can you elaborate more on this-make a deeper analysis? I'm left a bit confused and wanting more

Can you edit my Where's Waldo essay? I'll be posting it either today or tomorrow. Any help would be appreciated!