Undergraduate / College of Arts and Sciences: What work of art music, science, mathematics prompt UVA [2]

Please do not hesitate to correct and criticize every aspect of my essay, also please suggest suitable conclusions. Highly appreciated, Thanks!

I remember that day clearly, it was the night before my 14th birthday and I'd been getting sick of the contemporary music. The rap songs or the electronic dance music wasn't something I had always been infatuated with. Even in school I'd feigned my compliance towards that genre of contemporary songs to make my friends happy and obviously not to seem odd.

That night, I'd heard a funny name on the internet, Led Zeppelin. It sounded like some kind of a metal from chemistry class. I'd then learnt that it was supposed to be one of the greatest rock bands of all time. Although I'd never heard of them, I didn't have anything else to listen so I downloaded one of their songs.

Stairway to heaven it was titled and by god I did not know the profound effect it would have on my taste of music. The first time I heard the song I was quite unsettled as it was completely different from the type of contemporary music I had heard all my life and even though this was the first time I had ever been exposed to classic rock music, I felt a subtle connection with sound of the song.

Like something that I'd always known and wanted my entire life. The transition from the creamy, soft sound of Robert plant to the near perfect distorted one of jimmy page's guitar was surprising as I'd expected the song to remain soft. The unpredictability and complexity of the lyrics was completely different from that of the then happening music which bought me closer to myself as a person and a being.

Undergraduate / "thinking process" ; University of Virginia Supp; Favorite word and why? [2]

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We come across this word in all walks of life and we've been doing this ever since our years of innocence in a vast number of contexts. We realize that this word is not just a reflection of posture, movement or pretense , it is in fact a "thinking process" which constitutes the beginning of any action. This thinking process constitutes the most trivial aspects of our decision making and also brings a swathe of positivity in the course of action. The word is attitude. My father always told me that although hard work and perseverance were important factors in achieving an objective, the key however was always a positive attitude. He always used to end his lecture with a quirky fact which solidified the words impact, that when each number representing the letter is added, it sums up to a 100. "Hard work, perseverance would never amount to a 100%" he says. But your attitude does. Although this fact doesn't prove much, it does make a person think about whether the solution to any kind of problem would be a change in their thought process, their attitude. I can say this with experience as I used to encounter various problems and I could never solve those them. The negative in the problems then surprisingly changed to positive as fast as my attitude did and this made me realize the sheer intensity, the power of this word.