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mattislhao   
Dec 29, 2012
Undergraduate / I have been persecuted all my life./ CommonApp - Confessions of a Carnivore [8]

CommonApp - Topic of your choice
So this is my main essay for the commonapp.. This already went through some revisions, so grammar should be fine..
I am more concerned about the content. I got a lot of mixed reviews, so I wasn't sure if I should change it.
I appreciate any criticism and insights!
Thank you!!!!

Confessions of a Carnivore
I have been persecuted all my life. Not for my race, religion, or sexuality, but because of my diet. I love meat! But since Upton Sinclair's The Jungle, meat has become an anathema. I remember when Anne Hathaway came out as a vegetarian on the Ellen DeGeneres Show. The response was a "Good for you!" from Ellen and loud applause from the audience. I could not understand. What is so great about becoming a vegan? Why, when I refuse to eat my veggies, do I get a slap from my mother?

After receiving yet another lecture of how I am "going to die young if I don't eat my veggies," I went to the place where everyone goes for help: the internet. What I found on the web was a warzone between carnivores and herbivores. While herbivores promote plants, carnivores endorse meat. In the war of appetites, carnivores are undeniably losing. Though the situation seemed futile, my thirst for blood drove me to continue my research. After hours of digging online I found my brethrens: the Inuit.

Further research led me to the field of archaeology. In an article in LiveScience (October 2012), I learned that fragments of an ancient skull recently found in Tanzania suggest early hominids ate meat regularly, not just occasionally as previously indicated. Thrilled but confused, I contacted Manuel DomĂ­nguez-Rodrigot, the archaeologist who undertook the research. His response attributed the success of humankind to a carnivorous diet. After further discussion, we concluded that regular consumption of meat triggered major changes in human evolution. Meat was necessary for the development of our large human brain which distinguishes us from other animals. Essentially, eating meat made us kings of the animal kingdom.

My love for flesh, nevertheless, says nothing about what you should eat. If the vegetarian diet has worked for you, then stick with it. Despite what many say, there is insufficient data to conclude that any particular dietary regime is best. Biologically speaking, humans are most similar to omnivores, where balance is key. However, humans do not fit within the narrow parameters that classify other animals. Humans have the intellectual capacity to make a choice. And choosing what I want to have for dinner tonight is in essence what makes me human.
mattislhao   
Dec 29, 2012
Undergraduate / My reality after my best friend committed suicide; Common App/ Significant Influence [18]

I think this is really touching, but could use some clarifications.
I was left wondering what happened to you friend who tried to suicide.
I think this is a serious topic, and while the prompt does address you to say how it affected you, I think it might leave readers wondering

how your friend is now.

Just a thought.
mattislhao   
Dec 29, 2012
Undergraduate / I have been persecuted all my life./ CommonApp - Confessions of a Carnivore [8]

My biggest concern is that it is not personal enough. People have told me that it is too much information trying to prove my point.

Also, since this is a personal statement, I'm not sure if I will leave the readers (college admissions) with a good impression of me.

Basically, I'm afraid I sound just like a picky, immature brat who is really stubborn. (some people have told me that...)
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