jazzamonster
Jan 3, 2013
Graduate / 'process control engineering' - Graduate application: letter of intent [4]
Start the letter with "To Whom It May Concern:" instead of "Dear Sir/Madam"
"It is my ambition to be a process control engineer, and I believethat advanced training in a reputable graduate program will help actualize that dream."
I think your essay is concise, well-organized and it flows well. My only question is why do you say "I look forward to your acceptance" towards the end? Is it guaranteed that you're going to be accepted into this school? If not, change it to "I look forward to your response" or something along those lines.
Start the letter with "To Whom It May Concern:" instead of "Dear Sir/Madam"
"It is my ambition to be a process control engineer, and I believe
I think your essay is concise, well-organized and it flows well. My only question is why do you say "I look forward to your acceptance" towards the end? Is it guaranteed that you're going to be accepted into this school? If not, change it to "I look forward to your response" or something along those lines.