waaleg
Jan 19, 2013
Undergraduate / To validate being a writer; NYU/MICHIGAN/USC "WHY I WANT TO TRANSFER" COMMON APP [2]
I think it's powerful to include the obstacles/problems you've faced in life. However, I think you should should limit your encounter with drug addiction to a few words. Colleges read essays about students who have had difficult lives. What distinguishes one disadvantaged student from another is drive and determination to succeed and it is for that reason colleges would admit students like that. Therefore, I suggest that you should instead talk about how you have overcome and what you have achieved. Talk about your desire for writing and how it became one of your passions. Also, you should refrain from using the 2nd person in this college essay. When you use "you", you are possibly making false assumptions about the reader and that should not be the case.
I think it's powerful to include the obstacles/problems you've faced in life. However, I think you should should limit your encounter with drug addiction to a few words. Colleges read essays about students who have had difficult lives. What distinguishes one disadvantaged student from another is drive and determination to succeed and it is for that reason colleges would admit students like that. Therefore, I suggest that you should instead talk about how you have overcome and what you have achieved. Talk about your desire for writing and how it became one of your passions. Also, you should refrain from using the 2nd person in this college essay. When you use "you", you are possibly making false assumptions about the reader and that should not be the case.