Scholarship / Coffee,the most important commodity in the Cental Highlands; SCHOLARSHIP [11]

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Scholarship / Coffee,the most important commodity in the Cental Highlands; SCHOLARSHIP [11]

thank you a lot.
might you help me revise this paragraph:
"Diversification of agricultural products is also a potential trend for sustainable development of Vietnam's agriculture in the future. The courses such as Food chemistry & analysis, Food sensory & physical assessment, Advanced Food & Agricultural science, Food microbiology, Principles of food preservation....will provide me with solid knowledge background and methodologies, which help me to deeper understand the biochemistry transfers during food processing as well as preservation, to response my questions in current researches, to make new research ideas in improving a stage of food processing for creating typical products of area and to find out the most effectively preservation methods for important commodities of Central Highland like cacao, avocado, durian...so as to balance of agricultural products between areas"

i dont think it is ok, but i dont know how to correct it. plz help me

Scholarship / Coffee,the most important commodity in the Cental Highlands; SCHOLARSHIP [11]

plz help me revise my answer
How did you identify chosen course of study
During the years of working at WASI, I took part in carrying out a lot of research projects of harvest and postharvest, and I recognized that there were enormous potentials in applying biotechnology in post-harvest. Nevertheless, the application of biotechnology in agricultural research and production is a weakness of WASI as well as Vietnam. Through my constant interaction with farmers, I realized that there exist a lot of drawbacks in their harvesting and processing technology, such as: primitive technology in preservation, backward situation of processing technology. Therefore Vietnamese farmers often surfer huge losses in yield. I strong believe deeper researches on the application of advanced technology of biotechnology will resolve these problems. Therefore I am eager to continuously study food science and biotechnology.

I never want to be settle for better- I always want to become the best. I have a great ambition to become an expert in food science, however I lack knowledge of biotechnology such as biological chemistry, microbiology, and advanced food analytical methods, that would enable me to dig the most deeply in this field. I was very excited when I understood that biotechnology applied in agriculture is the strength of Australia. Therefore, my study at Australia would open the door to the opportunities:

- To learn advanced technology and apply it the most effectively in my agriculture research, play a very important role for the Central Highlands region of Vietnam. Since food technology has general principle, I am able to use my skills across harvesting, processing, producing coffee, cacao, pepper, avocado, which are important commodities, to create diversification of products and a balance of agricultural products between areas, this is also a potential trend for sustainable development of Vietnam's agriculture in the future.

- To learn other soft skills such as modern food analysis methods, project management, strategy building...
- To develop my professional networks in the field in Australia which will allow me to bring to my institute more opportunities to exchange knowledge, experience, and research methodology and thus better research outcomes.

I am certain that my study in Australia will create a synergy between my work experience, gained education and personal features and also will allow me to become the leader in Food science not only in my institute but also Vietnam.

Scholarship / Coffee,the most important commodity in the Cental Highlands; SCHOLARSHIP [11]

thank you, Dumi.

Scholarship / Coffee,the most important commodity in the Cental Highlands; SCHOLARSHIP [11]

plz, help me correct the next paragraph:
I never want to be settle for better- I always want to become the best. I have a great ambition to become an expert in food science, however I lack knowledge of biotechnology such as biological chemistry, microbiology, and advanced food analytical methods, that would enable me to dig the most deeply in this field. I was very excited when I understood that biotechnology applied in agriculture is the strength of Australia. Therefore, my study at Australia would open the door to the opportunities:

- To learn advanced technology and apply it the most effectively in my agriculture research, play a very important role for the Central Highlands region of Vietnam. Since food technology has general principle, I am able to use my skills across harvesting, processing, producing coffee, cacao, pepper, avocado, which are important commodities, to create diversification of products and a balance of agricultural products between areas, this is also a potential trend for sustainable development of Vietnam's agriculture in the future.

- To learn other soft skills such as modern food analysis methods, project management, strategy building...
- To develop my professional networks in the field in Australia which will allow me to bring to my institute more opportunities to exchange knowledge, experience, and research methodology and thus better research outcomes.

I am certain that my study in Australia will create a synergy between my work experience, gained education and personal features and also will allow me to become the leader in Food science not only in my institute but also Vietnam.