Undergraduate / Motivation to Business Studies; Degree at JKP [4]

my essay's prompt: Motivation to business studies and taking the degree at JKP.

Undergraduate / Bachelor's degree in Nursing - my background, attitudes, and interest essay [5]

Hi, Reziel! I have some suggestions for for your essay.

-Growing up in the Philippines was a difficult experience.
I think that the word "difficult" is not suitable here. Maybe the experience is "unforgettable", or "sad" or something like that.

-In our town, that was my mother and grandfather.
So what does "that" refer to?

-I knew beyond any doubt what it was that I wanted to do with my life.
I think "with" should be replaced with " in"

-I didn't feel that I was making the right kind of a difference.
This sentence is rather vague, what is the "difference" here

-they believe that I would make a great nurse.
Make should be "Become"

and last but not least, i feel that your conclusion is too short and curt. You should rewrite it to emphasize your dream of becoming a nurse.

good luck!

Scholarship / NUS Scholarship App Essay - Achievements & academic interests [3]

I think that there are some mistakes here. You should review for the better.
-Therefore, be it by memorizing or constantly practising.
I can not understand "be it by" here.
- I believe these values and beliefs will help me excel and succeed in the future.
the structure is : Help+ to do sth
Good luck!

Undergraduate / Motivation to Business Studies; Degree at JKP [4]

essay to demonstrate your interest to study at JKP

Prompt:. Motivation to business studies and taking the degree at JKP

From youth, my dream is becoming a successful business woman in the future. Then I could help the poor in the remote area in the world and have enough money to take my mother abroad to have her illness treated. Besides, I am often engrossed in delicacy of landscapes of Europe. Resulting from my dream and interest, I desire to study Business in a country in Europe. After a long time of searching, I found that ULA in Sweden is really what I am looking for. I believe that ULA would bring me an outstanding education and wonderful environment that I always long for.

Everything always has its origin. The reason why I want to have much money to help the poor and have my mother illness treated is originated in my childhood. At that time, my father often bought me Chicken Soup for the Soul books. Therefore, as a very young girl I realized that I am so lucky to have such a good life. I had the chance of going to school, the chance of living in the love of both of my parents. However, I feel sad to think that somewhere in this world, there are still many unlucky people who do not have a comfortable like mine. Although I am just a little girl born in a poor country, I believe that with my determination, I can become a successful business woman in the future to help the more unlucky persons than me. My ambition does not stop there because my wish also is having my mother illness treated. My mother had an illness with her hand which can be cured in nowhere in my country however many times my family tried. That hand has fed me, embraced me during my childhood and helped me stand up me whenever I fell. I can sacrificed my hand for her willingly, but the hospitals in my country have no answer to that illness. I wish one day I can have her hand treated and she would not feel painful as now any more. Two above reasons are what are always urging me to study abroad, especially in Europe, a region I often dream of and believe in its remarkable education.

However, with my family's current financial situation, I can not easily afford to study abroad. After studying the educations and the policies of many countries, I feel very impressive at the "free tuition" of ULA university in Sweden. With an outstanding education standard, ULA is ranked as the top business university in Sweden as in Europe. Through research, I learned that ULA is belong to Community of European Management Schools( CEMS) which first mission is to set a global standard of excellence for pre-experience Master's in management. I believe that with opportunities and accesses which ULA bring to its students, ULA's students can develop their abilities fully and even further their expectation. Born in a poor country, I understand deeply how crucial studying environment is. I hope after graduating from ULA, I can take part in and make my little contribution to CEMS in order to develop and resolve financial matters of the world. After my friend's narration, who is studying in ULA, this university bring students the practical knowledge and sharp skills to work out hard problems under the limited time. Far from a passive approach of studying, students here are required to make a habit of being active in their work and self-motivated. Those skills are really what I found that we need to master nowadays. Next year, ULA is going to cooperate with two famous universities about Art and Technology to make up a big general university. I more eager to study in such a comprehensive environment. Some friends told me that my plan is so adventurous because I do not know the Swedish and I will stumble over the cultural shocks. However I think that challenge will force me to change into a strong person. I have ever imagined the student life in ULA if I am admitted. I would be engrossed in thick books in the modern library, taken part in school's activities enthusiastically and mastered critical skills with other colleagues through team-work tasks. I also would stay up late to learn Swedish in the evening, and may be work part time job in the weekend to get the experience of the practical life. A saying goes: One thing that can not kill you will make you stronger. Indeed, life is always filled with adversity but the fruits of overcoming adversity make it worthwhile.

These days, I am studying Sat I for the coming test. The time is still little for me, plus a lot of other tasks I must carry on. I have to refuse most of the invitations for going out. I set a strict schedule for myself. Some friends did not understand me, think that I am too strict to my life. I accept their misunderstanding although I feel very hurt. Just I know that how precious the chance of being admitted into ULA to my life.

I believe that with the specialized academic environment, developed over the years by dedicated researchers, teachers and even students, ULA will put its students on the fast tract to a career in international business. The wide range of knowledge acquired during the years of study enables students of ULA, equipped with the skills and competence required in our rapidly changing world, to find suitable work in a great number of institutions and enterprises.

I believe that choosing me as a member of ULA will never make you regret. I am totally confident with my abilities and my ambition to become a successful businesswoman coming from ULA- a famous University in Europe. Moreover, I came from Asia, where future market growth will lead to huge opportunities for doing business. I am totally confident that I understand and can work well in Asia market. A little further, I hope to make a bridge between Europe and Asia to build associations to help the poor in the world. Anyway, whether I am admitted or not, I wish ULA more and more successful in training businessman of the world, create a community of talented students to make our world more and more wonderful.