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Jul 7, 2013
Writing Feedback / Parents have numerous influences to teach us what to do [6]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

No matter how people discuss the statement that parents are the best teachers, there would be some arguments agree with it, while others do not. By virtue of personal experience, social phenomena and several research between parents and children, I prefer to agree with the statement. The most important reason and specific examples will be described below.

Firstly, parents effect our behavior. As we are unmature and young, parents always show us which way to go. For example, they teach us how to speak, grab our hands and teach us to walk. Also, they take care of us until we can do things alone, which we simutaneously learn from them. With parents' taught, we turn ourselves into independent people.

Secodly, parents share their lives with us connectively. On one hand, from children to adult, we grow up with parents by our sides. For instance, mostly, we see parents in our first sight. On the other hand, people who live together share similar experiences. We automatically become more and more alike to people who live with us for a long period, such as parents.

Last bu not least, parents are powerful to children. When we are young and unmature, we listen to parents. When we become teenagers, we are legally protected and controlled by our parents. When we grow up, we respect our parents for their giveness and careness. As the result, the advices from parents are more important than any other person.

Consequently, when it comes to agree or disagree with the statement that parents are the best teachers, the above arguements are considerable and influentable. Either people are willing to be effected by parents or not, parents still have numerous influences to teach us what to do. Therefore, I agree with the statement that patents are the best teachers.
axn1118   
Jul 11, 2013
Writing Feedback / TOEFL- "A development of more intensive ways to exploit the natural environment" [7]

It is quite fabulous to quote with someone's words. Especially when it is relevant to the topic.

However, the following suggestion that you may give three supporting paragraph in the independent writing.

consumption of resources such as electricity and water by the factory will affect the nearby communities.

Should it adds "the" in front of the word "consumption"?

By the way, I think your essay is great!
axn1118   
Jul 11, 2013
Writing Feedback / TOEFL; Nowadays, dependence on neighbors is much less compared to previous eras [2]

Nowadays, neighbors depend on each other less than the people in the past

When it comes to discuss about this statement, I agree with that neighbors depend on each other less than the people in the past. The reasons are as follows.

First of all, people rather know their neighbors nowadays. By virtue of the strangeness, neighbors have little chance to depend on each other. For example, I used to attend to a sociology class. One day, the professor in this class made a violation about a question that whether you are familiar with your neighbors or not. Surprisingly, there were half and more students who voted for the answer that they are not familiar with their neighbors. That is why people can not seek for neighbors' help in the present.

Secondly, people have less confidence of others than before. In these days, people are easily meet someone who wants to take their fortune away. For instance, I ran into a man who grabbed a huge bag of shoes when I was jogging in the street of my community. He told me that he was about to donate the shoes he asked from others to contribute. And, he asked me whether I would like to donate some shoes as well. I did donate. Unfortunately, it was shockingly for me to find out that he stole the shoes from our community and sold them on the internet. So, this experience made me trust people harder than before.

Last but not least, people interact with others on the internet more than people used to be. In fact, we no longer make friends face to face. Take my personal experience for example, I used to hang out with my friends in the past. We went shopping, singing and other outdoor activities. But, I hang out only on the internet with them by now. It leads us to depend on the friends we meet on the internet rather than on the neighbors we meet face to face.

Consequently, neighbors depend on each other for the reasons in the above statement. Because people rely on the reaction in the internet more than face to face, neighbors become less important by now. Also, people hardly trust each other than before, which makes the relationship between neighbors set up in a difficult way. Otherwise, people are not familiar with their neighbors in the present. That's why they don't seek help from their neighbors. As the result, I agree with the statement that neighbors depend on each other less than it used to be.
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