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Sep 12, 2013
Undergraduate / 'Bored of being a social nobody' UBC Application Essay--Activity Essay [4]
TOPIC: -Tell us more about one of the activities you listed above, explaining what your goals were, what you did to pursue them, the results achieved, and what you learned in the process. (maximum 200 words)
Bored of being a social nobody in high school, I tried out for host of the annually Christmas Gala and easily stood out from over 60 candidates with my outstanding spoken English. My goal, obviously, was to put on a memorable show for nearly 700 audiences. Therefore, four of us, two hosts and two hostess, worked together to come up a theme that would most effectively capture audiences' attention. We progressed from classical Christmas Eve to 2012 apocalyptic day; drafting 4 or 5 different versions of emcee lines to fit different stage settings. After nailing down the motif, we kept revising our lines and jump right in to numerous rehearsals. Just as the saying goes: He that shoots often shall at last hit the mark. The gala turned out to be a gratifying success. We hosts received a plethora of praises from the students and my pronunciation was particularly appreciated by an English teacher. Looking back on the whole month working with other host members, show mangers and school teachers, I found out in joy and surprise that I did possess advantages in group coordination, besides, my passion and patience make me a reliable and cheerful person in group work.
Please help me check this essay's grammar and structure! Feel free to give suggestions and comments. I'd appreciate them a LOT!!! Thank you! :)
TOPIC: -Tell us more about one of the activities you listed above, explaining what your goals were, what you did to pursue them, the results achieved, and what you learned in the process. (maximum 200 words)
Bored of being a social nobody in high school, I tried out for host of the annually Christmas Gala and easily stood out from over 60 candidates with my outstanding spoken English. My goal, obviously, was to put on a memorable show for nearly 700 audiences. Therefore, four of us, two hosts and two hostess, worked together to come up a theme that would most effectively capture audiences' attention. We progressed from classical Christmas Eve to 2012 apocalyptic day; drafting 4 or 5 different versions of emcee lines to fit different stage settings. After nailing down the motif, we kept revising our lines and jump right in to numerous rehearsals. Just as the saying goes: He that shoots often shall at last hit the mark. The gala turned out to be a gratifying success. We hosts received a plethora of praises from the students and my pronunciation was particularly appreciated by an English teacher. Looking back on the whole month working with other host members, show mangers and school teachers, I found out in joy and surprise that I did possess advantages in group coordination, besides, my passion and patience make me a reliable and cheerful person in group work.
Please help me check this essay's grammar and structure! Feel free to give suggestions and comments. I'd appreciate them a LOT!!! Thank you! :)