Undergraduate / 'We all love mathematics' - UC Supplement [7]

Hey I like the topic for both of your essays. Why is the supplement so long? All mine are 150-200. As of right now I am not sure if the first prompt fits. Since it is about your world maybe you can relate your parents helping you with math olympiad made you want teach others in the same way as a share of experience. However the 1st and 2nd paragraphs do not transition well. So a transition about your world of math with parents making you want to help others would be great in my opinion. Do you see what I am saying? Also I have done mathlete, math olympiad, mu alpha theta, and AMC so a bit of a common interest there.

For the bike essay, I do not get a good sense of who you are. I also do not see the complete significance besides your dad having someone to ride a bike with. You could elaborate more on how riding a bike makes you feel. I also do not see how proud you are about this incident

Great start to both of these...I look forward to reading more of your essays. Idk if you can trust my input though because I myself have yet to write an exceptional essay. I will write one on my numerous experiences with cross country running. Honestly more detail...could have stuff like eating PB and J on a cliff...feeling like you are at the top of the world. Feeling the wind in your veins...the exhilaration of riding down as fast as you could without your hands and legs...include aspects about the terrain...don't be afraid to over-describe...for example one technique I have seen was relating different aspects together...like just add 5 cups of sugar, white like the snow that graces the sweet maple trees at our north-carolina house

All in all great start. As I said I am not an expert with essays so idk how helpful my comments are.

Undergraduate / 'We all love mathematics' - UC Supplement [7]

I am not sure if this fits because the value of supporting others does not relate to the fact that others failed to support you in your election. At the same time it is hard to see how it relates to you as a person. A good example of something fitting this would be placing in the top 15 at a cross country race. It fits well because it requires you to fully exert yourself physically all summer and constantly try and improve your race times. It also fits because it may high-light your determination as a person because previously maybe you were not the fastest runner but was willing to do whatever it takes. A good example fitting a personal quality could be your helpfulness towards others. So for prompt two you can talk about how you want to share the experience of math with others.

E.g.
One time, I was chilling with the NHS math tutoring with the Bros Seong Hwa and Justin Bartell. When we were not practicing calculus together we were helping others with topics from algebra II to calculus. It felt good to give back to less-advantaged students who apparently sat through a lesson without the solution "clicking" in their heads.

With the deftness and slightness of hand, I picked up the dry erase marker. Dong Sun, my mathematical differential equations professor at the university, always had a clear cut, no-bullshit explanation for the seemingly complex concept. I always admired the way he would glide across the room with the marker making swirls and other curvilinear shapes that dotted the board.

His confidence so beautiful in deriving differential equations with Euler's method. Every day was a new set of cursive letters or advanced methods of differential equations. I felt the same ease as he did while describing logarithms to TJ Rowetta. I consider it my job to simplify specific types of math problems into 5 or so steps. It dismays me to see students who try and invent their own math. I tell them, this has been around for hundreds of years. Follow these steps and go through the same problem solving and you should be good on most problems.

This is just an example...see how I expanded this? and made it me.

This isn't the best...haven't done essay writing in a while. Wish I could help more but I have a few hours of hw to finish up

Undergraduate / 'We all love mathematics' - UC Supplement [7]

Hey I emailed you. Also how come on here I replied to this but then I came back later to find that I did not reply and my message was removed?