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Posts by lexie94
Name: David White
Joined: Nov 18, 2013
Last Post: Nov 18, 2013
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School: Freedom High School

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lexie94   
Nov 18, 2013
Undergraduate / "Math just makes sense"- UC Transfer personal statement #1 [3]

Hi! Im open to any comments and suggestions! This is the Trasnfer #1 Prompt for the University of California college system.

What is your intended major? Discuss how your interest in the subject developed and describe any experience you have had in the field - such as volunteer work, internships and employment, participation in student organizations and activities - and what you have gained from your involvement.

I have always had an interest in numbers. Throughout all my years of schooling I have earned good grades in all of my classes, but math has always been the subject that I have felt the strongest and most comfortable in because it makes sense to me unlike any other subject. I am very intrigued by the specificity of math because there is always a distinct answer to every question. I love being presented something that needs to be solved because when I finally solve it I get a feeling of accomplishment.

Using math outside of the classroom has made me even more fascinated by it. During my last two years of high school I tutored three of my friends in math. When I was helping them learn different concepts I also found that I was re-teaching myself those same concepts, which helped me understand them more, and I also gained a better understanding of some concepts that I had trouble learning. I also learn more about math from my job. My job setting is very fast paced and I have to accurately take measurements of various items, which has significantly helped me with being able to use numbers more efficiently.

To be honest, up until my senior year of high school I had no clue what I wanted to major in because I never really thought about a certain major. I always tried to figure out what I wanted to be when I grew up but my decision constantly changed because I continually thought of different careers. During my senior year I started thinking differently. Instead of trying to figure out what my career was going to be I asked myself what could I major in that would be fun and enjoyable. A few things came to mind but one in particular was math. Once I thought of math as a major I was amazed I had not thought of it previously - it was like the idea of it was there the whole time but I had just now realized it.
lexie94   
Nov 18, 2013
Undergraduate / "I'm leaving" said my mom; A&M ; circumstance, obstacle or conflict [2]

This is an awesome essay! I'm so sorry you had to go through that. I wouldn't change a thing content wise. there's only a few grammatical errors.

75 Firebird = 75' Firebird

that's what make us strong individuals=that's what makes us strong individuals

And when you talk about the other woman your dad marries and how her son goes to the same school you start the next sentence talking about your dad but you don't clarify that its your dad. you just start, "And he...". It should go, "And my father.."

Other than that it's great!
lexie94   
Nov 18, 2013
Undergraduate / My parents are my support - WORLD I COME FROM [5]

I think this is a great essay! I think it is well written. I have two critiques. First is your introduction. I think you need to start it off differently. Maybe just talk about your current goal to contribute. I wouldn't have the dream of being a princess in there because it's every girls dream when they are young. The second critique I have is about your last sentence. Maybe try wording it differently. It just seems a little awkward.

Other than that it's awesome:)
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