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Posts by Mellowjedi203
Name: Estevan Talavera
Joined: Nov 26, 2013
Last Post: Nov 26, 2013
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From: United States of America
School: Colony High

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Mellowjedi203   
Nov 26, 2013
Undergraduate / Taiwan had been a dream come true; accomplishment or event, formal or informal [5]

Very well said with extremely vivid vocabulary but it seems like you use this to your advantage in prolonging and magnifying the intensity of something that isn't that profound.

"But I suppose that is (that's how) society works (functions) nowadays. Other than that... impeccable. Please return the favor!
Mellowjedi203   
Nov 26, 2013
Undergraduate / "Mental Transformation" - UC; World I come from [5]

Please be brutally honest, but sensible. Here's the prompt. ( disregard paragraph spacing )

"Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations."

I come from a family with a long history of shortened and undersized education. Both of my parents were born into large families in which they were frequently told that college wasn't a high life priority. They went through high school with no intent of continuing their education after graduating because of harsh financial issues and the lack of encouragement. Subsequently, they had no one to look up to as a role model, no one to compel them forward.[..]
Mellowjedi203   
Nov 26, 2013
Undergraduate / 'the National Blue Ribbon' - UC/personal essay [9]

Thank you so much for your opinion, I would help but it seems like everyone has exhausted all of the imperfections and pointed them out.
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