ashleeyoox
Jan 16, 2014
Undergraduate / Progressivism. UCLA transfer personal statement [3]
redjester
1) I don't see why I would start out an essay being sent specifically to UCLA by calling them UC. Could you (or anyone) explain the reason of why I should do this? That my fault i thought you were listing the city because you had the comma, it would be University of Los Angeles or do they specifically have the "Calfornia" in there.
2) What I mean by Progressive is its very definition, although perhaps it would be more readily understandable if I replaced Progressive with Progressivism? For example Im a chemistry major and I'm lost to what u mean by progressive, besides the soup lol. Anyway because to serious when I here progressive i think progressing as in moving on and going forward, just put a quick simple brief definition - Progressive, ______ , xyz
3) "Which is?" Progressivism is that all-important ideology. Perhaps I should state that again to make the point more understandable, though.There u go! state that Progessivism, all-important ideology, then continue ____. Yes please do, only because sometimes not everyone understands or has background to what u are talking back
4) The Labels. Yeah, they're all my idea and you might be right about them not being a particularly good idea. Although unconventional, I thought it would help to frame each section to add context and avoid a blurry whole. MY opinion use the labels IF they asked for it, if not use the conventional standard way , its seems more of an essay that way
5) Although you are not overlooking of "the now", neither do you particularly adhere or feel confined to it either, which is rather refreshing. I'm making the point here that architecture and its education tends to be too focused on teaching the ways of the past and preparing students for the world as it is rather than the world it is soon to be<-- i like that idea!!! . This, I believe in a mistake as stated in this paragraph. That sentence that confused you is stating that although UCLA doesn't overlook the world as it is now in regard to their architectural education, neither do they let it limit them either. If you're failing to grasp this, or that the essay is about Progressivism in architecture, that worries me as that's my entire argument for wanting to attend UCLA in the first place.
redjester
1) I don't see why I would start out an essay being sent specifically to UCLA by calling them UC. Could you (or anyone) explain the reason of why I should do this? That my fault i thought you were listing the city because you had the comma, it would be University of Los Angeles or do they specifically have the "Calfornia" in there.
2) What I mean by Progressive is its very definition, although perhaps it would be more readily understandable if I replaced Progressive with Progressivism? For example Im a chemistry major and I'm lost to what u mean by progressive, besides the soup lol. Anyway because to serious when I here progressive i think progressing as in moving on and going forward, just put a quick simple brief definition - Progressive, ______ , xyz
3) "Which is?" Progressivism is that all-important ideology. Perhaps I should state that again to make the point more understandable, though.There u go! state that Progessivism, all-important ideology, then continue ____. Yes please do, only because sometimes not everyone understands or has background to what u are talking back
4) The Labels. Yeah, they're all my idea and you might be right about them not being a particularly good idea. Although unconventional, I thought it would help to frame each section to add context and avoid a blurry whole. MY opinion use the labels IF they asked for it, if not use the conventional standard way , its seems more of an essay that way
5) Although you are not overlooking of "the now", neither do you particularly adhere or feel confined to it either, which is rather refreshing. I'm making the point here that architecture and its education tends to be too focused on teaching the ways of the past and preparing students for the world as it is rather than the world it is soon to be<-- i like that idea!!! . This, I believe in a mistake as stated in this paragraph. That sentence that confused you is stating that although UCLA doesn't overlook the world as it is now in regard to their architectural education, neither do they let it limit them either. If you're failing to grasp this, or that the essay is about Progressivism in architecture, that worries me as that's my entire argument for wanting to attend UCLA in the first place.