oreo2016
Feb 13, 2014
Undergraduate / How to make my essay more rememberable?-Virginia tech transfer [4]
Hey guys, I am transferring to Virginia tech and this is the Personal statement prompt "State why you wish to leave your present college and attend Virginia tech? maximum 250 words
I am having trouble making it personal and rememberable with so few words. I am also about 20 words over limit. What can I take out without taking away from the meaning.
When answering the question: "what are your career goals?", for my eighth grade scrapbook project, I answered, a biologist; and when the admissions officer interviewing me for the early college program at X College, I said again, a biologist-today that still hasn't changed. I know what I want. Now a sophomore at X at 18, I couldn't be more sure. I have had opportunites in college at 16 that my highschool peers havent got to experience yet. I have planned and executed an entire ceremony for the entire freshman class as a freshman, worked with international students from all over the world, and conducted experiments and dissections on a variety of subjects.
Yet, some things are missing socially and academically. I have an interest in biomedical engineering that I can not pursue at my current college nor is there enough research opportunites for me to participate in. I am also a commuter so I don't have a traditional college experience like I would if I lived on campus and even if I did, the campus is not active and most students leave over the weekend. Additionally, I would like to have a stronger Native American community than I do now being 1 of 3 Natives on campus.
Virginia Tech provides me with a large, beautiful campus with active students and Native American community. And as a respected engineering and research university, it has numerous opportunites for me to participate in research and pursue a minor in biomedical engineering. I look forward to stepping on the Virginia Tech campus as a junior in the fall.
Hey guys, I am transferring to Virginia tech and this is the Personal statement prompt "State why you wish to leave your present college and attend Virginia tech? maximum 250 words
I am having trouble making it personal and rememberable with so few words. I am also about 20 words over limit. What can I take out without taking away from the meaning.
When answering the question: "what are your career goals?", for my eighth grade scrapbook project, I answered, a biologist; and when the admissions officer interviewing me for the early college program at X College, I said again, a biologist-today that still hasn't changed. I know what I want. Now a sophomore at X at 18, I couldn't be more sure. I have had opportunites in college at 16 that my highschool peers havent got to experience yet. I have planned and executed an entire ceremony for the entire freshman class as a freshman, worked with international students from all over the world, and conducted experiments and dissections on a variety of subjects.
Yet, some things are missing socially and academically. I have an interest in biomedical engineering that I can not pursue at my current college nor is there enough research opportunites for me to participate in. I am also a commuter so I don't have a traditional college experience like I would if I lived on campus and even if I did, the campus is not active and most students leave over the weekend. Additionally, I would like to have a stronger Native American community than I do now being 1 of 3 Natives on campus.
Virginia Tech provides me with a large, beautiful campus with active students and Native American community. And as a respected engineering and research university, it has numerous opportunites for me to participate in research and pursue a minor in biomedical engineering. I look forward to stepping on the Virginia Tech campus as a junior in the fall.