Writing Feedback / ACADEMIC WRITING Nuclear Energy: Boon or Bane? [2]

I read the essay, Critiquing it for and against needs to be done in a systematic manner. In the first step you have to decide which side to join in the end, for the nuclear plant or against it. When this is done, offer for and against arguments. You have to make sure that in your critique paragraph you build up your case step wise (gradual) and in the conclusion connect all the major points of the various steps you constructed and make the conclusion in the last 2 sentences which would automatically be explosive as the reader would not be hit with any surprise and awkward conclusion but will have a well connected paragraph which would inherently be its own support. If you need more help pls feel free to post a message again thanks Jennifer

Undergraduate / "... if you try to teach a fish to climb a tree it will live its whole life believing it is stupid" [4]

I read your Essay, I see a lot of negative information in there. For instance, that your parents were divorced when you were fairly young. This translates into putting you in a challenging position right from the beginning and it must have left some scars on your personality... you dont need to share all this with the school. Second you mentioned that your folks were not formally educated. This also is big no no, dont share this with the school either. Mention stuff that shows your desire to command the future, show the place of Texas A&M in the world and tell them you want to join A&M because of its global position because you are beyond Aggieland and so on.... Hope this was helpful. jennifer

Undergraduate / Study aboard is one of my academic goals ; Personal statement [2]

A 300 word essay has to be precise and concise and it must not deviate at all from the thesis statement. I read your essay and the beginning and the body is loosely constructed, in other words its not a gripping piece of writing. Whats more is that there is no conclusion. what is needed is a really simple but a gripping account of a personal statement. Since this is only a 300 word essay i would suggest a professional writer to do it and you can get it done for around less than 50 dollars it would be money worth spent. there is this blogger at blogspot his blog is called topgradesnow. you can search it in there there is suggestion for professional writer. hope this was helpful