Scholarship / "Revolution and Determination" - Questbridge Biographical Essay [3]

The media res in the beginning was a great start but the essay doesn't come to a full circle. The idea is enforced but there was too much telling. The clincher of your essay shouldn't be you blatantly summarizing and telling your reader that it's the clincher but rather you giving a stream of events that leads the reader on

Each time I would read about their secret clinics or about successful operations conducted with the most primitive medical tools, I was always left awestricken and inspired. to figure it out themselves.

I registered in more rigorous classes and finalized my decision to partake in the International Baccalaureate Programme
Both of these are things that should be listed in the extracurricular section of the questbridge app not here. Listing extracurricular and difficult classes is not worth putting in your essay, that's where you should shine your personality.