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masteringIELTS   
Apr 25, 2014
Writing Feedback / Should children be reeducated with severe methods? [8]

A healthful comportament in childhood depends in many cases on religious and cultural matters. Consequently, the sense of politeness and mischivious manners differ between nations. While in South Eastern countries stricter approaches to educate children are preferred, in Western countries is more common to utilitsate kindful methods. In this essay I will set forth the benefits that these two educational approaches ential in a child's upbringing life.

On the one hand, children who receive a more severe education are impelled to enter maturity at an earlier age, owing to the fact that they are taught that an inappropiate behaviour could result in unwanted punishments. For instance, in Africa the educational system is still based on draconian academic rules. Pupils are reconducted with physical punishments. This permits teachers to relish a more quiet and peaceful atmosphere in class, due to the fact that students acknowledge that their mistakes could lead to detrimental consequences. Thus, as this shows, it is clear that severe rules could be an effective and direct method to render children comprehensible forms of conduct.

On the other hand, children are more likely to feel loved and consequently act better towards their parents when being educated in an embraceful system. Take for example infants in Europe. As numerous psychological reseach have showed in the pedagogical realm, toddles who are upbrought in a lesser severe environment tend to be more sympathetic in their childhood. Therefore, it is clear that upbringing children with kindful words rather than austere acts pays dividens ulitamtely.

To conclude, after analysing the benefits of both sides, I believe that education children in a slow-paced method is more favourable in the long-term basis, due to the fact that it is at the stage when a child builds their character. Were children only to be educated with strict conducts, the sense of emphatisim in humanity would be dramatically depleted.
masteringIELTS   
Apr 25, 2014
Writing Feedback / Should children be reeducated with severe methods? [8]

where is the real prompt for this task? It is always good to include the prompt in your post together with the essay

Sorry. Here you go with the question for task 2:
"In some cultures, children are expected to follow very strict rules of behaviour. In other cultures, children are allowed to do almost anything they want. What are the merits of each opinion? What is your position on the matter? Include relevant examples in your response".

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