Writing Feedback / TOEFL: In the modern world, we should never be impolite to another person. [7]

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Believe it or not, people always confront the problem that the mushroom development of the society give rise to the increasing situation of the impoliteness behavior, thus making them confused to handle it. When faced with the decision of being polite or not, quite a few claim that they would like to treat others the way by which people consider themselves. Nevertheless, in my part, I deem keeping politeness as my premiere inclination. Among the numerous factors which influence my choice, there are mainly two reasons as follows.

The paramount factor with my agreement is that keeping polite leaves better impression on others. Politeness, as we all know, is formed in the rules which potentially set by people's census on the correct behavior towards different occasions and issues. Being politeness gradually attract more attentions in the modern times in that the moral behaviors encounter a serious crisis under the high speed development of economy. In ancient times, an outstanding philosopher in China, Confucius, who was the representative of Chinese traditional civilization, put great emphasis on the significance of politeness. He pointed out that being polite should be a high priority in guiding not only the personal conduct, but also the development of society. Therefore, the Chinese government inherits this belief and put it into practice on the construction of Chinese society. The slogan of the political conference in China is to build a harmonious society based on the ancient beliefs.

The second convincing reasonable explanation I would like to mention is that more opportunities could be derived for our career if we can become a polite individual. Provided that a person, who is highly skilled at certain areas, always behave rude and impudent, it is undeniable that every corporation are unwilling to accept such behavior even if they are eager for a knowledgeable genius. According to the statistics, the extreme politeness in Japan is the key to success in the business world. To illustrate further, in the United States.I went to a newly-opened restaurant owned by a Japanese for its universal popularity. After my enjoyment in this restaurant, I finally got the secret of its achievement--that is politeness. Every steps during the service, I can deeply feel their sincere treatment and respectful attitude, accounting for the fact that a myriad of people prefer to have a dinner there even if the price is not so agreeable.

Admittedly, in some special circumstances, people are hard to control their tempers and may easily get annoyed so that little impolite atmosphere is brewed. Some may say we should not being polite to others who have inferior moral background and cultural education. Furthermore, an seemingly unavoidable quarrel or fight may be formed if no one want to make a compromise. Yet, other's impoliteness is not an excuse for our inappropriate actions. Maybe we need a apology in order to get an agreement and harmony rather than a more severe conflict .

Based on the analysis I have mentioned above, all factors are contemplated. As a result, Being politeness is the one of the indispensable step to enhance our own temperament and create more opportunities not only for our future but also for a more harmonious world since we live in the homeland of human civilization, not in the ape's forest.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL: Teaching is harder than it was in the past. [4]

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Last week, I chatted with a friend ,who is a English teacher in a famous educational organization, about some confusing problems during her profession. The mushroom development of economy has given rise to the extending need for different education at specific stages. When encounter the issue of the challenges of teaching, quite a few maintain that the widespread technology makes teaching easier to carry out. Nevertheless, in my part, I deem teaching is harder than it was in the past for most cases. Among countless reasons which influence my choice, there are mainly two factors as follows.

When it comes to primary teachers, it seems that this rudimentary stage of education requires more professional skills for teachers in the modern times. Primary schools set a wide array of courses, which potentially need teachers to be versatile in order to keep up with such reformation in the class. A concrete example can further illustrate this change. My sister, who is now a primary student in our local primary school, has various classes such as piano, oil-panting and penmanship. Thus, her primary school teachers always possess at least two professional knowledge, which can be seen at the situation that her math teacher also teaches dancing. As a result, the increased demand for teachers' professional expertise definitely enhances the difficulties of teaching.

Regarding to high school teachers, they encounter a similar situation as well. A great emphasis has been put in the high school education at present, explaining the fact that unavoidable teaching difficulties will haunt those teachers. On account of the significance of being admitted by an excellent university, high school teachers have to be very careful about their teaching methods and about their students' mental attitudes toward study. Take my own experience as an instance, for the sake of the effectiveness of teaching process, my history teacher put great attention and effort on making power point about different historical sections, which makes it easier for students to absorb a myriad of historical points. In addition, she always communicate with the students who failed at weekly quiz and adjust their unsuitable study habits by sharing a more practical one.

Admittedly, as for college teachers, the situation is just the other way around. Today, the excessive accesses provided from high technology lessen the pressure of teaching process.

Students can easily get a wide range of information from Internet, TV, and many electric devices. Furthermore, the modern world affords students with more opportunities to put what they have learned into practice. During this process, teachers are faced with less teaching task in the classroom. However, this is the only case that I can come up with to demonstrate the factor that teaching is not harder than it was in the past.

Based on the analysis I have mentioned above, three different vital stages of teaching are contemplated. As a result,teaching is more harder than it was in the past in that for most cases like primary and high school teaching confront a more complex situation.