Graduate / 'I have been fortunate enough to have my grandmother be a part of my life' - PA school motivation [5]

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My interest in medicine began in college while volunteering and taking science classes. Intrigued with science and wanting to lend a helping hand, I majored in Biology and volunteered in the pediatric unit of a hospital. At the hospital, I interacted with children afflicted by various illnesses, from pneumonia to cancer. Witnessing the doctors, PA's, and nurses collectively work together to make a difference by understanding the physical and emotional needs of these patients, influenced me to also want to do the same. Concurrently, I helped underserved populations as Vice President of Unite for Sight. In this organization, I raised money for cataract surgeries in third world countries, performed free visual acuity exams, and educated the public about eye health. Amongst seeing sickness through my volunteering endeavors, I observed the decline in my brother's health. Through this personal hardship and my volunteering experiences in college, I gained a deep understanding of mental and physical illnesses, developing patience and compassion for humanity.

After graduating college, my work and shadowing experiences helped me understand what it takes to care for patients and be a tool in their recovery process. I joined the American Redcross and on a weekly basis, amongst many other duties, I call those affected by unfortunate circumstances due to natural disasters and financial issues to coordinate a plan for improvement. Appreciating my educational background and fascination with biology, I became an anatomy TA at a local college. Every week, I helped my tutees by increasing their depth of knowledge and I guided them with tools for learning. In the clinical setting, I work as a Certified Nurse's Assistant. While working as a CNA, I have assisted dementia patients with their activities of daily living and most importantly, developed an appropriate bedside manner. Through my work experience as a CNA, volunteering, and shadowing, I have the closest understanding of the perseverance, discipline, and professionalism one must have in order to be a healthcare professional

I realized I wanted to become a physician assistant during my personal encounter with a practicing PA. While growing up, I have been fortunate enough to have my grandmother be a part of my life. As I grew from a young adolescent to an adult, my physical strength improved over the years, however, I witnessed the decline in my grandmother's physical strength, ultimately leading to her loss of independence. When I started college, I often took my grandmother to her medical appointments. During a particular visit, my grandmother saw a curly-haired, young brunette named, Katie, she was a Physician Assistant. I keenly observed the interaction between my grandmother and her: she spoke to my grandmother with intelligence, compassion, and patience. She diligently seemed to familiarize herself with the injury that my grandmother sustained from falling and maintained a reassuring, loyal demeanor each time my grandmother subsequently saw her. With the medical advice and mode of treatment Katie recommended for my grandmother to follow, my grandmother obtained the utmost comfort she could. Seeing improvements in her strength and mobility was the catalyst for my interest in becoming a Physician Assistant.

I want to be that understanding physician assistant that imbues the patient and his or her family with trust, a positive entity that carries the patient through his or her treatment. I have been on the other side of the spectrum as the patient's immediate family and I want to take what I have learned through my experiences and practice with the full intention of extending comfort to patients and their families. . I wish to bring the knowledge I attain as a student to liberate people out of uneasiness.