Undergraduate / 'study methods required to survive in college' - Statement regarding GPA [11]

Thank you Sean. I appreciate the help and will get back to work.

Undergraduate / 'study methods required to survive in college' - Statement regarding GPA [11]

Here is my revision. Thank you again for the help.

My first semester in Kingsborough Community College was the most challenging four months of my educational career. In high school, I got high grades while doing very little work. I assumed that college would be the same way and didn't realize the amount of effort one must put in to achieve high grades. After getting my grades at the end of the first semester I was disappointed with myself and made a promise to study more and raise my grades. Immediately, I got to work, studying harder and accepting help from tutors when in need and because of that my grades began to rise. However, it was not enough to pull my GPA over 3.25, though I came close with a 3.18.

Undergraduate / 'study methods required to survive in college' - Statement regarding GPA [11]

Thank you so much for all the help. This is my first time on this forum and I will be sure to visit it whenever I need help. I was never very good at writing essays and am glad that I can find help here.

Here is my final draft with all the revisions.

My first semester in Kingsborough Community College was the most challenging four months of my educational career. In high school, I got high grades while doing very little work. In all honesty, I assumed that college would be the same way and didn't realize the amount of effort one must expend to achieve high grades. After getting my grades at the end of the first semester, I was extremely disappointed with myself and made a promise to study more and raise my grades. Immediately, I got to work, studying harder and seeking help from tutors when in need. As a result, my grades began to rise. My GPA excluding the first semester is 3.43. However, due to the marks of my first quarter, the grades were not enough to pull my GPA over 3.25. I did come close with a 3.18 and have found the system of studying that works best for me. With this weekly schedule of studying a minimum of 2 hours per day, I am extremely confident that I will be receiving marks well above 3.25 when I pursue my bachelor's degree.

Essays / Can't think of an essay topic that is the most common topic ever [11]

Seems like your essay can be about anything you like. If that is the case, I recommend writing about something you are interested in or know a lot about. You can write about border control, stem cell research, health care or any other government polices. Just choose something you find interest in and will have a fun time writing.

Hope I was able to give you some ideas and good luck on your paper.

Undergraduate / 'study methods required to survive in college' - Statement regarding GPA [11]

Well the point of this statement is just supposed to be a short explanation of why my gpa is below 3.25. I am writing another one that is more detailed and that is the one they will be focusing on. The other one is about my longterm career and educational goals in 500 words. I dont want to get too wordy with this one becasue they ask for just a brief statement.