Graduate / 'prosperous and perfect dream' - MS in Mechanical Engineering SOP [4]

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"Devil's Eye" that's what the kids told me when I first saw a gas flare stack while visiting a tea estate with my family. The bungalow was at the top of a small hill and a gas processing plant was within few miles and the flare was visible. It was very bright at night and kids living in the estate used to call it "Devil's Eye". One night I've asked my father: "Is it really a devil's eye?" My father thought for a few seconds before responding to his 5 year old son. "It's a huge torch to light the area where the engineers are working to get natural resources that hidden underneath the ground" he said. And instantly I made an assumption that the engineers are very brave and not even dare to work near a devils eye. "I don't fear the devil's eye and want to be an engineer when I grow up"-on the next morning I declared to the kids.

Since that early encounter, I was intrigued by the wonders of engineering and technology. Having been brought up in a developing country like Bangladesh, I have seen how technology impacts our daily life. And after realizing the unfolding challenges and opportunities the field of engineering has to offer, that I decided to make my career in it. Because of securing impressive scores in my high school studies, I was selected by one of the most prestigious engineering schools in the country. Though I was not mature enough when I took the decision to choose Mechanical as my undergraduate major, but the decision was not an impulsive one. Curiosity to know history of the "Devil's Eye" from my childhood and inclination to solve drag-lift problems in car racing games motivated me to go for mechanical engineering.

The undergraduate curriculum in Mechanical Engineering at Khulna University of Engineering & Technology, gave me a comprehensive exposure to various core areas. As my undergraduate years progressed, I've acquired a strong background in the fundamentals of the basic mechanical engineering subjects like Thermodynamics, Heat and Mass transfer, Solid Mechanics, Fluid mechanics, Mechanics of Machines, Design of machine elements, Materials Science. I have also had an introduction to specialized areas like Finite Element Techniques and Operations Research. Thermal and Fluid Sciences has captivated my interest during my undergraduate study and in relation to that I had also completed a project namely "Numerical Investigation of Fluid Flow inside a Diverging Duct" during my final year at the university. The flow characteristic was studied numerically, within a diverging passage through which a periodically fully developed flow of fluid was considered as the working fluid.

In order to extend my knowledge outside the realm of my syllabus I was also interested to be familiar with the professional industry. My first job was at a heavy agro food processing industry equipped with modern machineries, where I learned a lot about manufacturing processes, material handling, and power generating equipment. Using Six Sigma methodology and the process improvement method known as Kaizen, our team has increased usage of the storage by twenty-six percent for the same production facility. However, I switched my job to a power generation company has designed installation facility and installation of power generating equipment. Using thermal image analysis I have also modified a number of exhaust systems of few facilities. All these academic and professional experiences encouraged me to enrol into the Postgraduate program.

Now I know why a flare stack is necessary in a gas/oil processing plant and believe one day engineers will find a solution to replace the stack. As William A. Smith (1908) said, "Engineering is the science of economy, of conserving the energy, kinetic and potential provided and stored up by nature for the use of man. It is the business of engineering to utilize this energy to the best advantage, so that there may be the least possible waste".

Choosing an apposite university for completing higher study in abroad is the most vital task. Last few months, I have searched a lot of universities and found some important factors, which helped me to point out my desired university. From my little experience, I found that the XXX University plays pioneering roles in research in various aspects of mechanical engineering, specifically in the area of computational fluid dynamics. I am highly interested in regular TA/RA support.

I would like to thank you for taking time to read this essay and I look forward to hearing a positive reply to my application.

Sincerely,

Undergraduate / Film photography feels like my own; it gives me ability to explore unknown things, even the dead now [3]

I struggled greatly "at first" with the mechanics of film photography at first, trying to figure out how the camera worked. You may like this way-

I was struggling with the mechanics of film photography when I got a film camera for the first time. With my knowledge in regular photography I thought can figure out the film camera easily. This obviously proved me wrong and tested my limits. The film had to be tightly wound within the camera, so that when the shutter would click, the dial would make a full rotation, pulling more and more film out of the roll. My mom laughed at me for a while, because I went through about five rolls (that all ended up being blank) until I finally got the hang of it. It was really frustrating at first, but it generated the everlasting thirst in me. With weeks spending on it, I have now beautiful film photography to show, despite the frustration that serves as a reminder that I shouldn't give up at anything and that nothing is impossible if you keep working at it.

I think you should break this sentence into more simple.

Film photography allowed me to take a more artistic approach to my photography in yearbook, which I personally believe is the reason our book received such high praise from students as well as critics. Our book the year before was even considered one of the top thirteen yearbooks in the country, an honor that had never been bestowed on our school before. But, with the incorporation of my film photography, it reached a level beyond what it had reached the previous year. All types of people felt the ability to be connected to it.

It seems bit vague to me-

Film photography felt like my own thing and it gives me solace knowing I have my own little thing that can take me away from reality sometimes.

I would suggest to use more simple sentence.

Undergraduate / The decision of what career I would like to pursue is a very difficult and stressful time for me [6]

"As I was growing up, I had many of the traits that most engineers posses." I think you should remove this line. And you should tell the reader why you were aspired to be an engineer.You can use this quote "Engineering is the art of directing the great sources of power in nature for the use and convenience of man. Thomas Tredgold (1828)" and come up with an idea around it.