jasonma2046
Oct 25, 2014
Undergraduate / My Best Worst Experience - Summer Camp Abroad (alone) at the age of 8. -- Common App Personal Essay [6]
This is a very good essay indeed! However, I think that the information you want to convey to the readers is not very clear and strong. For example,in the story of the religious conflict, you have not mentioned about what religions both of you belong to and what is the conflict and different beliefs you have. Well, that is my personal opinion.Good luck!
This is a very good essay indeed! However, I think that the information you want to convey to the readers is not very clear and strong. For example,in the story of the religious conflict, you have not mentioned about what religions both of you belong to and what is the conflict and different beliefs you have. Well, that is my personal opinion.Good luck!