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Name: Erica Aya
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Last Post: Oct 25, 2014
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ericaaya   
Oct 25, 2014
Undergraduate / Studying the brain - Cognitive Neuroscience- Brown Supplement [4]

Hi everyone, I need help proofreading one of my supplements. I'm applying to Brown early decision so please give me feedback ASAP, thanks!!

Why are you drawn to the area(s) of study you indicated in our Member Section, earlier in this application? If you are "undecided" or not sure which Brown concentrations match your interests, consider describing more generally the academic topics or modes of thought that engage you currently.

When I was younger, I thought the brain was the most repulsive looking organ because it resembled a mass of intestine-like worms. I could have never imagined being interested in studying the brain. However, this changed once I took AP Psychology and Biology in high school and studied cognition, the mind, and neural systems. I was doing a significant amount of research after school to attain a deeper understanding of the topics discussed in class, and for each question I had answered, two more arose. Last winter, when I read Consciousness Explained by Daniel Dennett on my flight home, I realized that I was rather passionate about cognitive neuroscience. I am drawn to cognitive neuroscience because the field concentrates on studying human cognition from a behavioral and biological perspective. Ultimately, I aspire that my time spent studying cognitive neuroscience will contribute to finding a treatment for psychological disorders.
ericaaya   
Oct 25, 2014
Undergraduate / Studying the brain - Cognitive Neuroscience- Brown Supplement [4]

Does this sound any better?

When I first embarked on my journey through high school, I enrolled in classes from a plethora of subjects in order to pinpoint what I wanted to study in college. After taking AP Psychology and Biology in high school, I concluded that I was interested in studying cognition, the mind, and neural systems. I was doing a significant amount of research after school to attain a deeper understanding of the topics discussed in class, and for each question I had answered, two more arose. Last winter, when I read Consciousness Explained by Daniel Dennett on my flight home, I realized that I was rather passionate about cognitive neuroscience. I am drawn to cognitive neuroscience because the field concentrates on studying human cognition from both a behavioral and biological perspective. Ultimately, I aspire that my time spent studying cognitive neuroscience will contribute to finding a treatment for psychological disorders.

I still feel that my essay sounds dull. : /
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