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May 27, 2015
Writing Feedback / The power of personal characteristics and its influence on our development [NEW]

Hi dear friends,
Here is my writing task 2.
Thanks for your comments and instructions.
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Topic: Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life.

Which do you consider to be the major influence?


This might be the question everyone would ask himself at least once in his lifetime: "Could all my achievements be considered as the result of my built-in characteristics or me, myself, have learnt from the experiences and chosen my way?"

Obviously there is an assortment of traits that the human's child is born with; some personal factors that could act as a guiding light when reacting to the different situations that he or she might deal with. Therefore our characteristics are the main sources of our unconscious behavior in childhood. On the other hand is the environment in which we are growing up, that is significantly influenced by our parents' attitude to the life. They can treat the child leading him to strengthen his positive characteristics and weaken the negative ones or vice versa. Therefore the main structure of our personality, based on which most of our decisions would be made in future, is constructed before adulthood during a subliminal process.

Furthermore, one essential factor of the human's maturity is learning from the experiences. Most of us would happen to deal with some people who was not so talented but succeeded due to hard working and learning from his failures. While the degree to which people take their experiments into account could differ from one to another.

From my point of view, the power of personal characteristics could not be disregarded, knowing the fact that even the extent to which we learn from the experiences depends on our personal factors and the way we think. I believe that most of our developments or failures are the results of personal traits led us to whether learn from our past experiments or not.
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May 27, 2015
Writing Feedback / Material on the internet should be censored or controlled to protect the public. [4]

Dear friend,
Your writing is very good grammatically, while I think you'd better extend the vocabularies used in writing.

Please find my comments as follows:

Of courseIt is true that the public has to be protected from illegal activities, but there are better possibilities to do that than censoring the internet! One principal reason for the success of the internet washas been always the freedom of speech and therefore I think it is rather important to protect the internet from getting censored or controlled.

Another reason not torejecting the internet censorship is that there is no kind of appropriate institution which could do this job.
Each country tries to do things for their own advantage and thus I think it is very dangerous to give one institution the power to censor such an important medium like the internet is .

For example like in China where people are not allowed to use facebook. Furtherand governments and their politicians would try to enhance their power by censoring and controlling political enemiesthe oppositions and people with another opinion than their own.
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May 27, 2015
Writing Feedback / The universities should keep the doors open to all and students need to get equal chance in studying [2]

While the battle of male and female has been heard about for a long time, nowadays it looks desperately old fashioned. In today's societies men and women benefit from the same opportunities in almost every fields and the education as such. In my opinion preventing the women or men attending the university classes, even in some specific subjects, could be considered as an evident for the freedom violation in the progressive countries.

The arguments of the supporters of not giving the equal chances to male and female in education are made based on the differences in their biological abilities and the spirituals as well. These fans of -what I call- "sexual unparallelism", emphasizing on the emotional nature of women and the, so called, rational characteristics of men, try to categorize the university fields to feminine and masculine; such a wasteful effort which has been proved to be baseless by the number of women managed to thrive as scientists and the men as successful cuisines! So I think this is the matter of "preference and interest" rather than lack of ability.

Even if we accept the claims on priority of one sex on another in studying specific university subjects, still this is the person who should choose his way while I believe that this is not merely him who benefits from equal chances. In the light of taking into account the other half of the society's talents, enormous number of novel ideas, inventions and developments would come into appearance, which would have been dwindled under the shadow of dogmatism.

Concluding aforementioned arguments, I think that being aware of natural differences between female and male, the universities should keep the doors open to all walks of life. The students should be given the equal chance in studying whatever subject they opt to in order to make their personal talents fostered in a preferred way.
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