Writing Feedback / Material on the internet should be censored or controlled to protect the public. [4]

Oh jeah, I just found this forum and hope that you can help me with my essays. My English sadly is not the best but I strongly trying to improve my language skills. As I study English by myself could you please help me and read over my essay? If someone learns German at school (my mother language) feel free to ask me for help!

In my opinion material on the internet should not be censored or controlled to protect the public. Of course the public has to be protected from illegal activities, but there are better possibilities to do that than censoring the internet! One principal reason for the success of the internet was always the freedom of speech and therefore I think it is rather important to protect the internet from getting censored or controlled.

Material on the internet should not be controlled because it is impossible to control any person surfing on the internet. There are just too many people acting in the internet that the police will not be able to control everybody. Thus I think it is much better to invest more time in developing security technologies like firewalls and security certificates on internet sites! Additionally it is important to inform society in particular children how to behave in the internet. Parents and teachers should explain and emphasise the dangers of the internet very early to their children.

Another reason not to censorship the internet is that there is no kind of appropriate institution which could do this job. In which country should the institution be located and who should work for it? Each country tries to do things for their own advantage and thus I think it is very dangerous to give one institution the power to censor such an important medium like the internet is. There are many worse examples what is going to happen if a government starts controlling the internet. For example like in China where people are not allowed to use facebook. Further governments and their politicans would try to enhance their power by censoring and controlling political enemies and people with another opinion than their own.

In conclusion there are much better methods to protect people in the internet than censorship. Moreover it is very dangerous to control the internet as there will be always people who are trying to enhance their power by censoring things in the internet. The Freedom of Speech is very important for the internet and a crucial element of its success.

I am really thankful for your help!!!!

Writing Feedback / When choosing a career, financial gain should be the most important consideration. [6]

When choosing a career, financial gain should be the most important consideration.

In my opinion, when choosing a career, the money you will be paid for a job should not the most important consideration. It is true that money is important to enjoy life and sleep quiet without regrets. Anyway, I believe to be happy with your job should be the most important consideration before thinking about the money.

The kind of work you have to do, is much more important than the money you will get, as you have to do a job many hours a day. I think to be happy is what everybody wants to be. In order to reach this level of happiness, it is important that you are interested in your job and like it. Imagine how great the feeling can be to stand up early in the morning, excited to go to your workplace. For example if a person hates fish and each day he has to work up to ten hours in a fish factory he will get sad and depressed, even if he gets 10000$ a month for his work. The reason is, you can not replace lifetime by money!

Moreover, when choosing a career, it is important that the environment and working atmosphere suits for you, before considering the financial gain. As already mentioned in the previous paragraph, you will spend many time of your life in a job and therefore it is important to have lovely people around. In many cases people spend more time with their co-workers than their families. Thus a comfortable workplace and a good atmosphere are also inalienable conditions when choosing a career.

In conclusion money is not everything. On the one hand financial gains are important to have a quiet night without being afraid not be able to pay your bills. However, work is part of your life, so it is much more important that you are interested in what you do and have good working conditions.