Writing Feedback / ESSAY about the IMPORTANT of LOYALTY in a FRIEND &the CIRCUMSTANCES that led them show LOYALTY [3]

First would like to say, that i liked the essay very much. Here some mistakes i have noticed, but need to warn that i'm not the professional editor and use essay writer site usa for checking my grammar in the essays:

During that time , Phuong is the only one of my friend staying next to me, confiding, and encouraging me. - these parts are not uncoordinated:

During that time, Phuong was the only one of my friends was staying next to me, confiding, and encouraging me.
During this time, Phuong is the only one of my friends staying next to me, confiding, and encouraging me.

We are together striving for academic and going to the same high school together . - tautology, cut out one "together"