Posts by nathansp98

nathansp98

Aug 17, 2015

Undergraduate / Why Georgia Tech? - scientific skills further development, legion of extracurricular activities [3]

Hi. Thanks for allotting your time to read my essay. I'm an Indonesian student hoping to apply to GT. Your criticisms and suggestions are most welcome.

Beyond rankings, location, and athletics, why are you interested in attending Georgia Tech?

Most international students choose Georgia Tech because of the diversity of the campus. As a converging point for scientists worldwide, Georgia Tech offers the chance to get an unparalleled quality of education among multitudes of cultures. Furthermore, the innovative education system of Georgia Tech, which includes instructors acting as tutors and problem-solving classes, will surely help me overcome complicated problems easily and thus, enhance my creativity in cracking challenges. Though I am member of a science community in my school which often enrolls in various research competitions, I believe my scientific skills will be pushed to the limit at Georgia Tech. Moreover, as an enthusiast of debating activities at my school, the diverse student bodies provide legion extracurricular activities, which will give me the chance to take part in local communities. Therefore, I am interested in the opportunity to study at Georgia Tech.

nathansp98

Aug 17, 2015

Writing Feedback / SAT Essay: Are heroes those who speak up when others lack the courage? [3]

This is a good essay with indisputable examples and a strong main point. I do think that the opening paragraph - which should only say your position - is too long; you have said your whole point in the first paragraph, making the body paragraphs stagnant. "The most difficult of these challenges is speaking up against authority, as the consequences can include social rejection and harsh punishment. Real heroes are those who voice their thoughts when others lack the courage, despite these consequences." this should be in the second paragraph where you star to elaborate your position. This will make your essay more interesting to read. "The definition of hero is still closely linked with those who rely on legendary physical strength to do good deeds. Perhaps this is a result of the myths and stories of the past" this part should be more compact. In fact, it is even better to start the first concluding paragraph with your thesis.