Graduate / "Bioinformatics - the science of tomorrow" - applying to a variety of grad programs [7]

I am applying to a variety of grad programs for bioinformatics, some certificate programs, some masters. Here is the first draft of my personal statement if someone would be willing to edit it?

"Bioinformatics - the science of tomorrow", was the name of a seminar that I attended during my senior year of college. I had never heard of bioinformatics, but as I listened my curiosity was piqued. After graduation I started a job working as a Biorepository research specialist at ProMedica Toledo Hospital. Here, I discovered the future career potential in pursuing further education and training in the field of bioinformatics. Therefore, I am applying to the program of bioinformatics, hoping to receive my master degree in this field.

At my job in the Biorepository, we identify patients with different types of cancers or diseases and procure tissue specimens from their surgeries. We then work to distribute these specimens to researchers in the appropriate fields. Before sending these out, we do extensive data collection to provide as much information as possible. It is here that I think a background in bioinformatics could be extremely useful. As the biorepository I am employed by grows and expands, we hope to branch out to identifying and testing for biomarkers in the tissues that we procure. Furthermore, we look at large data sets of information, and having knowledge about computer programs and methods that could potentially help to streamline these processes would be incredibly beneficial.

Having received a Bachelor's degree in Biology, I have a solid background in the field. I participated in one year of research at a local children's hospital in Cincinnati, Ohio, where I gained experience in a multitude of lab processes and skills such as DNA extraction, cloning, cell culture, PCR, etc. I also took a senior capstone class my final year in college during which we delved into a multitude of high level research theses which challenged me to become better adept at analyzing and understanding these ideas, as well as writing a review paper of my own and defending it to the class.

Upon graduation, I hope to continue on at my current job, helping to expand and grow our biorepository. In the long term, I would like to find a career as a data scientist, possibly for a company such as the New York Genome Center. I enjoy the flexibility that a degree like this would offer. There are so many opportunities in this developing field, and it is possible to find a position that focuses more heavily on the science than the computer science or vice versa. I like the versatility and multitude of options available to me.

While I have learned a lot about the biological sciences, I realize that my academic record is not the best reflection of this. I have always had a great love and fascination for science, and I could never picture myself studying something else. Unfortunately, you do not always excel at what you love. I quickly learned as I began college that I struggle with tests in multiple choice format. I also found that I excelled in classes that were hands-on laboratory classes as well as those classes outside of the science discipline, receiving high marks for those classes. Additionally, I transferred schools halfway through my undergraduate education, but I was determined to graduate on time. As a result, I was forced to take multiple upper-level classes at once. While my grades were not what I would have hoped, I feel strongly that I understood all of what I was taught, regardless of what the exam results showed. I do not see this as a bad thing, but as a motivator to improve as I continue on with my education.

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