Jetninja
Oct 15, 2015
Undergraduate / Eternal Happiness. A choice from the activities section of a Common Application [4]
While I also agree with being more specific with an activity inside your activities section, I think writing about this topic could also work.
However, I would start off on the sentence where you begin talking about yourself:
"While I have fallen victim many times to putting things..."
While your ideals are a nice touch, I think the college wants to know why YOU would be choosing this as your only activity, not why everyone else would.
I also think you could cut some words here and there, like:
"...have found that true, consistent, and eternal happiness can only come from a relationship with God."
"Becauseof the realization that my faith is the only thing that can completely fulfill my longing for happiness..."
Now that you cut down a good portion of the essay, you can include that specificity I was talking about earlier, such as (random examples): the charity drive you run every christmas, or the summer retreats you have with your church group, or a small moment in how being greatly involved in the church has affected you in some way. Definitely make sure to specifically answer that "Why?" question, because that would separate your application response about finding happiness in God with someone else's application response about finding happiness in God.
-hope that helped!
While I also agree with being more specific with an activity inside your activities section, I think writing about this topic could also work.
However, I would start off on the sentence where you begin talking about yourself:
"While I have fallen victim many times to putting things..."
While your ideals are a nice touch, I think the college wants to know why YOU would be choosing this as your only activity, not why everyone else would.
I also think you could cut some words here and there, like:
"...have found that true
"Because
Now that you cut down a good portion of the essay, you can include that specificity I was talking about earlier, such as (random examples): the charity drive you run every christmas, or the summer retreats you have with your church group, or a small moment in how being greatly involved in the church has affected you in some way. Definitely make sure to specifically answer that "Why?" question, because that would separate your application response about finding happiness in God with someone else's application response about finding happiness in God.
-hope that helped!