veronika1988
Oct 17, 2015
Undergraduate / Volunteering and tutoring - my contribution to the UIC Honors College community [5]
Hello!
In this sentence you repeating yourself, I have helped the community in many ways; as a college student, I will help contribute to the UIC Honors College Program in countless ways.
try to rephrase, for example, Being a student I assisted the community in countless ways and I'll continue to do so as a member of the UIC Honors College Program.
Secondary, try not to start your sentences with "I" so much, use transitional words more often.
Thirdly, I transported instead of transport food trays and medical equipment to
Than, in the third paragraph you used the word "help" too much think of using synonyms, for example, assist.
Hope it was somehow helpful and good luck!
Hello!
In this sentence you repeating yourself, I have helped the community in many ways; as a college student, I will help contribute to the UIC Honors College Program in countless ways.
try to rephrase, for example, Being a student I assisted the community in countless ways and I'll continue to do so as a member of the UIC Honors College Program.
Secondary, try not to start your sentences with "I" so much, use transitional words more often.
Thirdly, I transported instead of transport food trays and medical equipment to
Than, in the third paragraph you used the word "help" too much think of using synonyms, for example, assist.
Hope it was somehow helpful and good luck!