mohibraza
Dec 27, 2015
Undergraduate / I have realized the importance of communication. Stanford Essay - Intellectual Vitality [4]
Stanford Essay - Intellectual Vitality
Here's my essay, I'm hoping to get second opinion and ways to improve it
Thanks a lot!
No one spoke to him, and everyone laughed at him. He had no friends. The moment I entered the orphanage, my goal became to focus on Hasan and befriend him. Talking to him in my broken Arabic didn't seem to pay off, it didn't seem enough. felt that Hasan needed reciprocity in order to open up to me. I told him everything about myself, including my list of crushes. Gradually, we became really close and by the end of my service at the orphanage, it was extremely difficult for us to say goodbye to each other.
My father's depression started about a month ago; he would hardly talk or eat. Everyday after school, I would sit next to him, entertain him with gossip from school, only to make him smile. Sitting with him everyday paid off when one day my father opened up to me. He poured out his problems and I listened.
Be it at home with my father, or at the orphanage with Hasan, I have realized the importance of communication. Communication doesn't always have to be two sided, just sitting and listening to someones problems, being there for them is as important as talking to them. I feel that effective communication by itself has the scope of solving major world problems such as racism and poverty. My craving for making a difference makes this quality very important to me, and the above experiences have given me a greater insight on how to achieve that.
Stanford Essay - Intellectual Vitality
Here's my essay, I'm hoping to get second opinion and ways to improve it
Thanks a lot!
No one spoke to him, and everyone laughed at him. He had no friends. The moment I entered the orphanage, my goal became to focus on Hasan and befriend him. Talking to him in my broken Arabic didn't seem to pay off, it didn't seem enough. felt that Hasan needed reciprocity in order to open up to me. I told him everything about myself, including my list of crushes. Gradually, we became really close and by the end of my service at the orphanage, it was extremely difficult for us to say goodbye to each other.
My father's depression started about a month ago; he would hardly talk or eat. Everyday after school, I would sit next to him, entertain him with gossip from school, only to make him smile. Sitting with him everyday paid off when one day my father opened up to me. He poured out his problems and I listened.
Be it at home with my father, or at the orphanage with Hasan, I have realized the importance of communication. Communication doesn't always have to be two sided, just sitting and listening to someones problems, being there for them is as important as talking to them. I feel that effective communication by itself has the scope of solving major world problems such as racism and poverty. My craving for making a difference makes this quality very important to me, and the above experiences have given me a greater insight on how to achieve that.