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Dec 14, 2017
Grammar, Usage / Need help with the grammar of some sentences from my sop [3]
Hi guys i am writing sop for graduate school admission. But I thought there are some confusing sentences which grammatically incorrect. Any help would be greatly appreciated.
1. Growing up in a family of allied health professionals, my favor for health sciences was inculcated. With this fondness as well as my love of mathematics, I shaped my career goal and interest towards becoming a health statistician.
2. Since December 2015, I volunteered at XXX assisting with set-up arrangements and record data.
3. With all experiences, I am fascinated with the enormous potential for developing statistical methods and tools in health sciences that is what I could see myself doing decades from now.
4.To achieve my career goal, I tried to develop my interdisciplinary knowledge especially computer science through self-study. Now I am able to grasp basic Python, Java, C++ etc. language. Additionally, in theory of biostatistics and related mathematics courses, I took calculus, linear algebra and probability for future preparation.
5.After a careful consideration, I intend to pursue a Master of Public Health in Biostatistics at XXX provides amounts of research and internship opportunities for me to gain multi-dimensional training. After learning through the curriculum and faculties' profiles and their researches, it further strengthens my desire to study at XXX.
Hi guys i am writing sop for graduate school admission. But I thought there are some confusing sentences which grammatically incorrect. Any help would be greatly appreciated.
1. Growing up in a family of allied health professionals, my favor for health sciences was inculcated. With this fondness as well as my love of mathematics, I shaped my career goal and interest towards becoming a health statistician.
2. Since December 2015, I volunteered at XXX assisting with set-up arrangements and record data.
3. With all experiences, I am fascinated with the enormous potential for developing statistical methods and tools in health sciences that is what I could see myself doing decades from now.
4.To achieve my career goal, I tried to develop my interdisciplinary knowledge especially computer science through self-study. Now I am able to grasp basic Python, Java, C++ etc. language. Additionally, in theory of biostatistics and related mathematics courses, I took calculus, linear algebra and probability for future preparation.
5.After a careful consideration, I intend to pursue a Master of Public Health in Biostatistics at XXX provides amounts of research and internship opportunities for me to gain multi-dimensional training. After learning through the curriculum and faculties' profiles and their researches, it further strengthens my desire to study at XXX.
