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Mar 3, 2016
Undergraduate / Why did you choose field of study Rice - Torn Between Two Essays [6]
Hi, I'm a prospective transfer student for Rice and I'm torn between how to write the why school of study essay. I'm transferring from Electrical Engineering to medicine. I originally wrote an essay saying my characteristics and why I want to study medicine, but then I had someone suggest that I should explain why I was transferring. So i wrote a second essay. I'm not sure which to use.
First Essay
I have a fascination with the extremes.
My mind unravels at thoughts of the endlessly large or small, captivated by how far I can push my psyche in either direction. It's this fascination, that attracts me to the Natural Sciences. From the inconceivably small of individual cells, organelles, and the minute intricacies of it all, to the immense and unimaginable, of the number of cells in our body, to the connections in the brain, the Natural Sciences fuels my endless ambitions. What draws me further though, is the humanity that brings it together. Whether as a doctor, maturing, crying and laughing with a patient, or as a researcher, beholdingg the impact of ones work in others lives, theres a rich compassionate element underlying it all. Rice, with it's Texas Medical Center, Proscience Research Collaboration, and close teacher student relations, is the perfect place for me to develop my ambitions, to achieve as much as my mind can conceive.
Second Essay
If you were to open up my family's DNA, somewhere among the countless C,G,T, and A amino acids, you'd find the genetic code for an engineer. Every field of study, from Civil and Mechanical, to Electrical and Aerospace, has been claimed by one of my many family members. So naturally, I followed the trend. However it seemed that my genes had come together a little differently, and ultimately, I discovered that engineering was not my calling. Rather I longed for what had been a passion of mine for years - the Medical Field. There was a humane element that I missed. The intimacy with patients, the emotions evoked as their struggles become mine, the compassion underlying it all, there's no field like it. I want a line of work that connects me with others, that is driven by relations and interaction. Medicine is how I combine my passions with my work.
I'm thinking about taking the last part of my second essay, and elaborating on it, but I'm not sure. Last year on my application I did the same thing and wrote about the compassionate side of medicine. I'm really torn, and I know it's complex, but what route do you guys suggest? I am still tweaking the second essay so feel free to edit anything out! I really want my essay to be powerful and not cliche. Thanks.
Hi, I'm a prospective transfer student for Rice and I'm torn between how to write the why school of study essay. I'm transferring from Electrical Engineering to medicine. I originally wrote an essay saying my characteristics and why I want to study medicine, but then I had someone suggest that I should explain why I was transferring. So i wrote a second essay. I'm not sure which to use.
First Essay
I have a fascination with the extremes.
My mind unravels at thoughts of the endlessly large or small, captivated by how far I can push my psyche in either direction. It's this fascination, that attracts me to the Natural Sciences. From the inconceivably small of individual cells, organelles, and the minute intricacies of it all, to the immense and unimaginable, of the number of cells in our body, to the connections in the brain, the Natural Sciences fuels my endless ambitions. What draws me further though, is the humanity that brings it together. Whether as a doctor, maturing, crying and laughing with a patient, or as a researcher, beholdingg the impact of ones work in others lives, theres a rich compassionate element underlying it all. Rice, with it's Texas Medical Center, Proscience Research Collaboration, and close teacher student relations, is the perfect place for me to develop my ambitions, to achieve as much as my mind can conceive.
Second Essay
If you were to open up my family's DNA, somewhere among the countless C,G,T, and A amino acids, you'd find the genetic code for an engineer. Every field of study, from Civil and Mechanical, to Electrical and Aerospace, has been claimed by one of my many family members. So naturally, I followed the trend. However it seemed that my genes had come together a little differently, and ultimately, I discovered that engineering was not my calling. Rather I longed for what had been a passion of mine for years - the Medical Field. There was a humane element that I missed. The intimacy with patients, the emotions evoked as their struggles become mine, the compassion underlying it all, there's no field like it. I want a line of work that connects me with others, that is driven by relations and interaction. Medicine is how I combine my passions with my work.
I'm thinking about taking the last part of my second essay, and elaborating on it, but I'm not sure. Last year on my application I did the same thing and wrote about the compassionate side of medicine. I'm really torn, and I know it's complex, but what route do you guys suggest? I am still tweaking the second essay so feel free to edit anything out! I really want my essay to be powerful and not cliche. Thanks.