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Name: Mahfudz Mutawalli
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Jun 14, 2016
Scholarship / Reflecting on UWC's mission and values, what you might contribute to the school/college? Why UWC? [3]

hey, could you help me with my essay :) i need a review

the question is like this "Why you are interested in attending a United World College. Reflecting on UWC's mission and values, what you might contribute to the school/college? How will the education in United World College help you meet your educational and career goals? Why do you want to go there instead of going to regular/international high school in other places?" and they ask me to write it in 300 words. and here is my essay.

I am interested in attending a UWC because i really want to study abroad and take a lot of life values from being an abroad student, where i should be able to organize my self instead from my parents. I believe uwc isn't only a school for doing that. From what i see, uwcers often change the world where they start it from their community. And uwc also give a lot of opportunities to their student for studying both non-formal and formal education and that's all makes me impress to uwc.

Uwc missions inspired me to study harder for sustainable future . it is possible to study with student from over the world where we can share our cultures and forget our differences. And to make it happen, i believe that every uwcers have been know that everyone in uwc wanted to be united rather than separated. And because of it, i will be respect everyone regardless people's gender, and socioeconomic, cultural, racial, religious or national background and be united with everybody.

Moreover, i will introduce the culture of indonesia as much as i can, even though it sounds cliche, but i love the diversity from indonesian culture since i was child. and i'd love to join in service activity that exist in uwc.

The EE and TOK in UWC will improve my skill in analyzing and understanding a problem. The IB will help me to prepare my university application. And i realize without a deep understanding and good preparation, it is hard to apply in top university with my condition as a vocational high school student.

I prefer to go UWC rather than other school because UWC open much opportunities for everyone and accept everyone to be thyself regardless anything, where regular school usually have limits for their students.
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