Scholarship / Chevening scholarship, I'm stuck at some problems in my application ... [5]

hi my friends .. this is my draft please check it and resend to me Any amendment

After i joined to work in one of the largest telecommunications companies in my country through my work as an electrical engineer occurred
A major problem as a result of entering the electric stun equipment and led to the damage and stop the service for several days, I stepped up to take over the leadership group and ordered to be the work of the team as soon as possible to avoid this crisis, so I did the composition of a team of three people, and in the first meeting with my team made it clear to them the size of the problem and harmful to the company and that it will take us speed at work and workmanship and perhaps it will take work outside the times of our working hours, we started to work and it took maintenance 3-day encounter-day weekend, after the completion of the work we prepared a meeting with heads of departments and have talked about the reasons for entering the electric stun headquarters

The company and how to avoid this problem again and prepare a proposal to improve the level of network lightning conductors work
The grounding