HiImShante
Aug 19, 2009
Scholarship / Scholarship Essay: Passion for Computer Science [11]
thanks! making changes now. anyone else with input, feel free.
thanks! making changes now. anyone else with input, feel free.
HiImShante
Aug 19, 2009
Scholarship / Scholarship Essay: Passion for Computer Science [11]
whoops, i didn't mean to keep expand in there. omitting expand.
whoops, i didn't mean to keep expand in there. omitting expand.
HiImShante
Aug 19, 2009
Scholarship / Scholarship Essay: Passion for Computer Science [11]
Okay i tried changing it. It's probably still crap, right? You have to excuse me, this is the first essay I've done in years. Again, thanks for the advice!
Okay i tried changing it. It's probably still crap, right? You have to excuse me, this is the first essay I've done in years. Again, thanks for the advice!
HiImShante
Aug 18, 2009
Scholarship / Scholarship Essay: Passion for Computer Science [11]
Okay, I see what you mean as far as the upgrading of computers is concerned. So would I rephrase it as this? Computers have gone from taking up an entire room to in the palms of our hands, which hosts a variety of different functions such as checking our email and even the weather.
Eliminating some exclamation points.
It was the year of 1996... What should I say instead? It was the year of Microsoft's Windows 95?
And lol, i didn't exactly mean devoted. I thought i would look good. Instead of devoted how about working with my childhood desires? hmm, I think I'm going to need a litle bit more help with that.
But I will make sure I put a little bit more about what I do in there.
Thanks for your help so far! Hope your chocolate dreams were sweet ^ ^
Oh yeah, to anyone else reading, it would be great to help me with my grammatical errors.
Okay, I see what you mean as far as the upgrading of computers is concerned. So would I rephrase it as this? Computers have gone from taking up an entire room to in the palms of our hands, which hosts a variety of different functions such as checking our email and even the weather.
Eliminating some exclamation points.
It was the year of 1996... What should I say instead? It was the year of Microsoft's Windows 95?
And lol, i didn't exactly mean devoted. I thought i would look good. Instead of devoted how about working with my childhood desires? hmm, I think I'm going to need a litle bit more help with that.
But I will make sure I put a little bit more about what I do in there.
Thanks for your help so far! Hope your chocolate dreams were sweet ^ ^
Oh yeah, to anyone else reading, it would be great to help me with my grammatical errors.
HiImShante
Aug 17, 2009
Scholarship / Scholarship Essay: Passion for Computer Science [11]
What do you think of this essay? Any punctuation errors? I need help haha.
The essay question was, "What has influenced your decision to pursue a career in computer science?"
As time progresses, computers continue to mold America, shaping it in a manner that benefits and connects today's society. The rapid upgrading of the CPU is beyond amazing and I'm glad I have been able to witness it. Just in my short lifetime, computers have gone from filling up rooms to fitting in the palms of our hands. What we have and use now can only get better, and that is the fuel that keeps me involved passionately with computers. My main goal is to not only simplify and advance the computer, but to uniquely create and expand. As a child, my love for computers started early. My family first got our computer when I was 5 and though I was fairly young, I became very attached to it. Me being able to run my fingers over ridged buttons with letters that seemed to magically appear on the screen fascinated me and kindled a deep desire in me to learn more. As computers were making gradual changes, I was also. I began to study the computer and familiarize myself with the very heartbeat and organs of the computer. It became more than a hobby; it was a desire, a passion of mine. With time and dedication, I was able to learn programming by the age of 15 and as of now I am in the process of making my very own paint program. Because I am an artist, I know what it is like to be left baffled by complicated paint programs with so called simplistic tutorials, so for my new program I will be creating more easy to use tools. That's what I can do with just books, tutorials, and advice. Just imagine what I can do with further education. I have been told that if you are making a living off of something you love, you will never work a day in your life. Computers are and will always be of great importance to me, and if I am able to work with them, I will truly "never work a day in my life."
What do you think of this essay? Any punctuation errors? I need help haha.
The essay question was, "What has influenced your decision to pursue a career in computer science?"
As time progresses, computers continue to mold America, shaping it in a manner that benefits and connects today's society. The rapid upgrading of the CPU is beyond amazing and I'm glad I have been able to witness it. Just in my short lifetime, computers have gone from filling up rooms to fitting in the palms of our hands. What we have and use now can only get better, and that is the fuel that keeps me involved passionately with computers. My main goal is to not only simplify and advance the computer, but to uniquely create and expand. As a child, my love for computers started early. My family first got our computer when I was 5 and though I was fairly young, I became very attached to it. Me being able to run my fingers over ridged buttons with letters that seemed to magically appear on the screen fascinated me and kindled a deep desire in me to learn more. As computers were making gradual changes, I was also. I began to study the computer and familiarize myself with the very heartbeat and organs of the computer. It became more than a hobby; it was a desire, a passion of mine. With time and dedication, I was able to learn programming by the age of 15 and as of now I am in the process of making my very own paint program. Because I am an artist, I know what it is like to be left baffled by complicated paint programs with so called simplistic tutorials, so for my new program I will be creating more easy to use tools. That's what I can do with just books, tutorials, and advice. Just imagine what I can do with further education. I have been told that if you are making a living off of something you love, you will never work a day in your life. Computers are and will always be of great importance to me, and if I am able to work with them, I will truly "never work a day in my life."
