Writing Feedback / In the globalisation era, children are pushed to be ready for their future live [3]

Hi @Pramudia27!
From my perspective , this essay could be seen as well-constructed example for aformentioned topic.However , you should write the underlying topic first so as to facilitate us to judge .If you want to raise your band , more academic vocabularies should be used ,diverse sources of grammar.

Hutama from Nancy university say ...
Syukon from Uppsala university say ...e -> No personal example in task 2 essay , use more popular role models