Pri901
Dec 14, 2016
Undergraduate / Since a very young age, I have learned to be independent and make decisions on my own [4]
@Holt Thank you for the suggestion.
@Holt Thank you for the suggestion.
Pri901
Dec 14, 2016
Undergraduate / Describing an Activity for University Admissions - Opinions Come Hither [5]
The last two sentences are kind of incomplete. It will be better to frame the sentences in another way as adding words will exceed the word limit.
The last two sentences are kind of incomplete. It will be better to frame the sentences in another way as adding words will exceed the word limit.
Pri901
Dec 14, 2016
Undergraduate / I gradually felt a big part missing from me. [9]
The essay goes smoothly but this portion..."This hit me hard and made me realize..." Can you put it in some better words.
The essay goes smoothly but this portion..."This hit me hard and made me realize..." Can you put it in some better words.
Pri901
Dec 14, 2016
Undergraduate / Since a very young age, I have learned to be independent and make decisions on my own [4]
Personal essay-Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful
Boarding school. That is my life in one sentence. I am been in boarding since I was in kindergarten before I could even learn how to wear socks properly. I can still recall the memory when my parents told me and my elder brother that we were going to boarding school. My brother was in grade two at that time and I was in kindergarten, both of us were excited not really knowing what a boarding school was. I was very enthusiastic because I got new toys and clothes. All I thought about was the playground and lots of chips and chocolates.
Being just a five-year-old, I would cry all the time, I didn't know how to do even the simplest things. But not having my mom around I learned to do things on my own. Since a very young age, I have learned to be independent and make decisions on my own as people will never be around to do it for me. Staying at a place with people of different age groups helped me learn things faster, like for instance, when I first went there, I wouldn't speak in English but only within a month I was able to converse in English as if it was my first language,staying in a particular place can have a huge influence. When I went home during my first vacation, I spoke to everyone in English as staying in school I forgot my native language! Sometimes, I think if I was at home I don't think I would have been able to become independent.
India is a vast country with a very diverse culture, if someone went to a different state it would feel like a whole different country as each state has its own culture and language. The students in my school were from different states,so there were differences but staying there with everyone, it helped me to learn to be non-judgemental and respect differences. As without differences, there isn't any learning.
Personal essay-Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful
Boarding school. That is my life in one sentence. I am been in boarding since I was in kindergarten before I could even learn how to wear socks properly. I can still recall the memory when my parents told me and my elder brother that we were going to boarding school. My brother was in grade two at that time and I was in kindergarten, both of us were excited not really knowing what a boarding school was. I was very enthusiastic because I got new toys and clothes. All I thought about was the playground and lots of chips and chocolates.
Being just a five-year-old, I would cry all the time, I didn't know how to do even the simplest things. But not having my mom around I learned to do things on my own. Since a very young age, I have learned to be independent and make decisions on my own as people will never be around to do it for me. Staying at a place with people of different age groups helped me learn things faster, like for instance, when I first went there, I wouldn't speak in English but only within a month I was able to converse in English as if it was my first language,staying in a particular place can have a huge influence. When I went home during my first vacation, I spoke to everyone in English as staying in school I forgot my native language! Sometimes, I think if I was at home I don't think I would have been able to become independent.
India is a vast country with a very diverse culture, if someone went to a different state it would feel like a whole different country as each state has its own culture and language. The students in my school were from different states,so there were differences but staying there with everyone, it helped me to learn to be non-judgemental and respect differences. As without differences, there isn't any learning.
